The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
In this argument the author is arriving upon the conclusion that adam’s realty is a better real estate firm to consult for selling one’s home. but the premises for arriving at such a generalized conclusion don not provide a credible support. A significant amount of vague assertions are made which might make the argument indefensible.
Initially, the author states that adam’s realty is a superior firm when compared to fitch realty, another leading real estate firm in the same town. The author begins his comparison in terms of real estate agents both the firms have. it is stated that the former has 40 real estate agents and the latter has got only 25. thus the author clearly assumes that more the number of real estate agents, higher will be the firms superiority. it might be the case that fitch realty in spite of having lesser number of agents, has got more competent one’s as compared to adam’s, agents which are better in terms of customer attraction and fetching profitable deals. Moreover, it is also stated that many of fitch’s estate agents work par-time. clearly, working part or full time does not justify their quality of works.
The author proceeds his argument by presenting statistics and figures about revenues and average home sales of both the firms. but these data only belong to the previous year. comparing only a single’s years of data for sales and revenue cannot be made as a base for arriving at the conclusion about the firms market value. according to the presented data, it is clear that in the previous year, adam’s realty was a better performer. but, what if for five years prior to the previous year, fitch had significantly higher numbers in context of the exactly same data. apart from that, a comparison of the average house sales of both the firms can be done if they have sold nearly same number of houses. Similarly, the pricing of houses is not uniform for both the firms. there is a possibility that adam’s houses are priced significantly higher as compared to fitch’s which makes their average higher.
The author also states his personal experience regarding selling an house with both the firms. according to him, ten years ago it took him four months to sell an house with fitch realty and last year it took him only one month to sell his house, when he chose Adams realty. it definitely seems vague to compare both the firm’s data that to when the point’s of comparison vary in time by a significant amount of ten years. The property markets are so volatile that ten years count for an entire generation of it. Even if we disregard this factor, apart from the time that it takes for the house to sell, the value of the sale matters a lot which is not accounted for in this study. thus these facts do not form a strong basis for the author’s conclusion.
Therefor, due to lack of concrete statistical evidence and unsubstantiated assumptions, this argument not immune to weakening. there are a lot of loopholes that are easily visible to target upon and the data presented, however authentic it may be, does not lend support to the argument for being imperviously true. The author should present more relatable facts and evidences to make his point in a lucid and flawless manner.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 562 350
No. of Characters: 2617 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.869 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.657 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.402 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 40.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.511 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...to consult for selling one's home. but the premises for arriving at such a gen...
^^^
Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...real estate agents both the firms have. it is stated that the former has 40 real e...
^^
Line 3, column 327, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
... agents and the latter has got only 25. thus the author clearly assumes that more th...
^^^^
Line 3, column 327, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: thus,
... agents and the latter has got only 25. thus the author clearly assumes that more th...
^^^^
Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'firms'' or 'firm's'?
Suggestion: firms'; firm's
... real estate agents, higher will be the firms superiority. it might be the case that ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
..., higher will be the firms superiority. it might be the case that fitch realty in ...
^^
Line 3, column 756, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Clearly
...tch's estate agents work par-time. clearly, working part or full time does not jus...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 781, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...work par-time. clearly, working part or full time does not justify their quality of works...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...d average home sales of both the firms. but these data only belong to the previous ...
^^^
Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Comparing
... data only belong to the previous year. comparing only a single's years of data for ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: According
...onclusion about the firms market value. according to the presented data, it is clear that...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 445, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...m's realty was a better performer. but, what if for five years prior to the pr...
^^^
Line 5, column 577, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Apart
...rs in context of the exactly same data. apart from that, a comparison of the average ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 780, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...uses is not uniform for both the firms. there is a possibility that adam's house...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 859, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... houses are priced significantly higher as compared to fitch's which makes t...
^^
Line 5, column 870, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... priced significantly higher as compared to fitch's which makes their averag...
^^
Line 7, column 66, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...s personal experience regarding selling an house with both the firms. according to...
^^
Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: According
...g selling an house with both the firms. according to him, ten years ago it took him four ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 160, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ars ago it took him four months to sell an house with fitch realty and last year i...
^^
Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... his house, when he chose Adams realty. it definitely seems vague to compare both ...
^^
Line 7, column 692, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...ich is not accounted for in this study. thus these facts do not form a strong basis ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 692, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: thus,
...ich is not accounted for in this study. thus these facts do not form a strong basis ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... this argument not immune to weakening. there are a lot of loopholes that are easily ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, similarly, so, then, thus, apart from, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2746.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 562.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88612099644 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64931741012 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 204.123752495 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466192170819 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 863.1 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5384529406 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.703703704 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8148148148 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7037037037 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.25449101796 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218881574896 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656843766115 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916689022272 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126255139692 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116895802228 0.0628817314937 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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