Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The role of contemporary subjects for example Information Technology is a major topic of concern in today's world. These subjects are being paid more attention to day by day. At that time, traditional subjects such as Art, Sport and Music are being dropped dramatically from school curriculum. Children are being suffered badly from these changes. This essay will address this issue.
On the one hand, there are many merits for these changes, it can be seen that these days, human are living in a modern world. Advanced technology plays a pivotal in human's life. It can be used to meet a range of requirements for example in every day communication, keeping in touch with friends, relatives is likely more difficult if there is not any mobile phone, searching for details is hard if human do not have the Internet. Therefore, people, especially children,youngsters need to be provided a change to learn more about this subject, approach modern technology in order to gain more knowledge, be more potential to develop the world's education.
On the other hand, it also has many disadvantages, this can be attributed to a host of factors. First, traditional subjects are indispensable in our life. There is an assortment of artists, athletes and singers, musicians who are successful today. It also proves that Art, Sport and Music are also need to be educated, These subjects are also of paramount importance, it can be used in many circumstances such as entertaiment, relaxation, physical and mental health's development.
In brief, i tend to gravitate towards the latter opinion, it is impossible to drop subjects for example Art, Sport and Music for the reason that they are also profitable and be used in a host of aspects in life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 119, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...these days, human are living in a modern world. Advanced technology plays a pivot...
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Line 2, column 238, Rule ID: ANINFOR_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in everyday'?
Suggestion: in everyday
...eet a range of requirements for example in every day communication, keeping in touch with fr...
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Line 2, column 469, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , youngsters
.... Therefore, people, especially children,youngsters need to be provided a change to learn m...
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Line 2, column 637, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...ledge, be more potential to develop the worlds education. On the other hand, it also ...
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Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
...oves that Art, Sport and Music are also need to be educated, These subjects are also...
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Line 3, column 459, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'healths'' or 'health's'?
Suggestion: healths'; health's
...aiment, relaxation, physical and mental healths development. In brief, i tend to gravi...
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Line 4, column 11, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... mental healths development. In brief, i tend to gravitate towards the latter op...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, for example, in brief, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01038062284 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97798662747 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543252595156 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.6170062164 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.428571429 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.066402550601 0.244688304435 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243456073041 0.084324248473 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0212850525891 0.0667982634062 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0442397276161 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00430299506866 0.056905535591 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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