Some people say that the best preparation for life is learning to work with others and be cooperative. Others take the opposite view and say that learning to be competitive is the best preparation. Discuss these positions, using concrete examples of both. Tell which one you agree with and explain why.
The ultimate goal of each person's life is to have a happy life in the term of having a good job, a happy family. The way to reach this goal is to learn and work through our lives. Some people say that learning to be competitive is the best preparation for life, others say that learning to work with others and be cooperative is the best preparation for life. In my opinion, I agree with the latter one because this way of learning brings comfort to everyone and it also is more effective.
First, people live in a society which includes many different individuals. To build up a strong cooperative society makes a life of each person more comfortable and enjoyable. For example, when I was in high school, my friends and I, we had common stress about how to pass the test to enter the University. I had three closed friends and we decided to team up and study together. Each person in four of us had strong in a different subject, so the plan was who was the strongest in a particular subject would help the others. All the concepts, theories, examples were hard to understand clearly. Learning together helped us reduced the time to figure those things out, and have more time to review them before the test. Our stress was relieved and we felt more enjoyable with studying. Finally, we were all accepted to enter the University that we desire to, in addition, our friendship became more tighten. Hence, I believe that working as a strong team is the best preparation for life.
Second, learning to work with others and be cooperative is an effective way to prepare for life. As you can see, in my story above, by studying together and support each other, my friends and I accomplished our tests better. We all reached our targets. Moreover, teamwork washed out the stress and other difficulties in studying. Entering the university was the first steady step in the preparation for our lives. Base on this, I support the opinion that the best preparation for life is learning to work together as a cooperative team.
In conclusion, I maintain that to have the best preparation for life, people should learn to work with others and be cooperative. Because learning in this way bring comfort and enjoyment for the whole society and it is also an effective way of learning. The world will be more beautiful and peaceful if each different individual has a teamwork attitude in life's activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
The ultimate goal of each persons life is to have a happy life in the ter...
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Line 2, column 48, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...people live in a society which includes many different individuals. To build up a strong coope...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68246445498 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65657460803 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45971563981 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1543335006 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9130434783 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.347826087 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351381479122 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110209825454 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16658773168 0.0737576698707 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269622812643 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12865587959 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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