The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The two pie charts depict the online shopping sales for four retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Overall electronics & appliances and food & beverage were the top spending areas for the years 2005 and 2010 respectively, while video games and home furnishings held the lowest spot comparatively for the same years.

In highest demand for the year 2005 was Electronics & Appliances, followed by Home Furnishings at 35% and 25% respectively. While it dropped to 30% and 15% each in the year 2010.

Food and beverages was the highest gainer with 10% increase at 32% which was complemented by 5% increase in Video Games sales with 23%.

It is clear that demand for Electronics & Appliances and Home Furnishings reduced on the other hand Food & Beverages and Video games was increased.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
while, as for, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 33.7804878049 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 663.0 965.302439024 69% => OK
No of words: 130.0 196.424390244 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.37664837539 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81397648335 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 76.0 106.607317073 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584615384615 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 186.3 283.868780488 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5366413708 43.030603864 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.23603664747 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278973251334 0.215688989381 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176415234361 0.103423049105 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.259123553388 0.0843802449381 307% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155211331449 0.15604864568 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181969696916 0.0819641961636 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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