Multicultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, since the development of the society has brought people from half of the other hemisphere together, modern multicultural societies are formed with blended people, lifestyles and cultures. Many states that this trend bringing more advantages than disadvantages to a country. I concur with such reflections.
To begin with, a society with mixed culture will result in the opening relationships of the citizens and the countries as well. Friendships will be established by inhabitants cross nations with similarities. Due to this fact, the cordiality between the two countries can be generally improved. An example of this is the close-knit relation of Vietnam and South Korea. Furthermore, there are several benefits along with it, including the tourism, economy and social advantages. Many of Vietnamese cuisine like Pho have now been sold across the South Korea, and the wave of Korean music has created a disparity in the taste of Vietnamese listeners.
Moreover, it cannot be denied that adopting new culture helps enrich the country own culture. For instance, in the past, lunar new year was not celebrated by most of people in the world, but now, the majority celebrates the Chinese new years, from American to Australia. And yet, thanks to the multicultural, now that people can enjoy pizza without needing to travel to Italy, eat Kebab without arriving to Turkey.
In conclusion, a multicultural society does not have any negative impact but in contrast, there are many values can be gained in such society as a blended society not only creates mixture in cultural but also brings the cultures of thousand countries in the world tied together.
- The chart below shows the changes in car ownership in Great Britain between 1961 and 2001 61
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- The chart gives information about the amount of oil discovered worldwide from 1950 to 2020. 73
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 159, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...t, lunar new year was not celebrated by most of people in the world, but now, the majority cel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2734082397 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86112416815 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629213483146 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0013618713 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.307692308 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0606092605544 0.244688304435 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0220652922166 0.084324248473 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458178812942 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0428421060242 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040274106492 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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