Some people think that parents should be responsible for teaching children how to be good members of society. However, other people believe that school is the place for children to learn how to be good members of society.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Moving towards the 21st century, many people are nowadays expressing a deeply concern about the role of parents and school in children’s development. In fact, there are some who hold firmly to their belief that parents play a vital role in educating children on how to be good members of society. However, others argue convincingly that schools should take the responsibility of teaching children how to be good members of society. Therefore, some arguments both for and against this issue will be addressed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, there are two main points for people to defend the former argument that parents have a great contribution to the development of children in society. First of all, it is a well-documented fact that parents are considered to be the first teacher for their kids, thus they have great influences the development of children. The most obvious example to prove is that parents should teach children the correct moral behaviors, such as how to show their respect to elderly people or how to communicate with others effectively. Furthermore, there is no doubt that children can learn from what their parents do, so they can learn an important lesson that “they get what they pay for”. For instance, parents should follow traffic rules and save the environment by reducing the use of plastic bags.
On the other hand, there are two primary shreds of evidence for people to support the latter argument that school is the place for children to learn how to be good members of society. First and foremost, it is commonly accepted that the role of educating is to prepare the contemporary world for children so that schools should not only teach academic subjects but also provide them with soft skills. A clear example is found to prove is that communication, problem-solving and teamwork skills are well-known to be the three most important skills for the kids to be familiar with real contexts in their future life. Equally important, there is no denying that children need to try their best to get high academic achievements, so they should be aware of the crucial lesson from what they perform with their studies in their lecture. This is supported by the fact that schools should be built a score-ladder to monitor the children’s attempts over time.
All things considered, it is my strong belief that parents and school contribute greatly to the development of children in their future. Accordingly, I strongly recommend that governments should enhance people’s awareness in terms of the crucial role of school and parents in children’s life. If this recommendation is carried out, the comprehensive developments of our future generations will be ensured.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('deeply') instead an adjective, or a noun ('concern') instead of another adjective.
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in fact, no doubt, such as, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2295.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 447.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13422818792 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94955562481 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480984340045 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.0033639336 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2941176471 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1176470588 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485213757966 0.244688304435 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177377079694 0.084324248473 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137964151709 0.0667982634062 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328750001701 0.151304729494 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137843708451 0.056905535591 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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