Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give y

The debate whether providing more sports facilities to the citizens can help people healthier has sparked controversial issues. While I agree that developing more sports center improves people’s lives, I would discuss both sides of opinion before supporting with an example.

Firstly, it is intuitively obvious that when people take part in sports activity, they are likely to release stress and improve their immune system which is like a natural pain-killer. Also, youngsters or adults are likely to be more active and escape the sedentary lifestyle. For example, a study by the Health Organization shows that 40% of people in America have started to lose weight after participating in various sports. Besides, sports like swimming is proven to reduce coronary heart disease, insulin level and concentration of cholesterol in our body

However, individuals think that sports have no positive effects on our health and well-being. This is because of the fast foods that inevitably hinder our diet which leads to obesity. As most Europeans often reiterated, "what's the purpose of exercising if we would consume high-calorie diets every day?" This is indeed true, but we cannot blame other sources to give excuses. Junk foods would soon become expensive food and governments should limit the number of restaurants that provides foods to the locals that jeopardize men and women. In fact, with the advancement of technology, advocates to this believe that modern antibiotics or medical care can instantly improve a person's fitness.

To recapitulate, providing more sports equipment to people can eliminate toxins and cure one's health, but we should not forget that there are conundrums that make it less efficient.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44814814815 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8363818023 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.677777777778 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9577488405 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.727272727 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5454545455 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.81818181818 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194805054272 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631247767492 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374239865389 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106931426671 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244019998187 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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