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The world has changed thoroughly during the past fifty years. It seems that nothing essential can be conveyed by grandparents because they lived a completely different life from today. However, as far as I am concerned, it should depends which kind of advice the grandparents suggest.
For advice associated with values and perspectives about life, grandparents can give helpful advice. There are always some factors that will not change with the time flowing, virtues and praiseworthy personalities such as honesty and kindness are parts of them. Grandparents who own plentiful interesting experience can use vivid stories to impress their grandchildren how essential of these virtues are. Since their own experience are so funny, they have greater odds of attracting young generations to take in their advice. In addition, grandparental love truly exists. It is not an odd thing that a child prefer grandparents more and would like to be close to them. Thus, grandparents advice can be more useful than others because young children love them and would like listening to them. Since young generations have not already built up their values, grandparents who experience more have deeper comprehension on this world can give life advise to help grandchildren to establish their own values towards this world.
For other advice, however, we should admit that grandparents’ idea may not so helpful because they have less ways to receive information. When grandchildren face a problem, they desire a piece of useful advice to solve the problem. For grandparents, the more information they have, the more likely they are to make better recommendations. However, grandparents have poor ability to obtain information, since they are not familiar with the ways to receive information in nowadays such as the search engine. Grandchildren who know various ways to receive information even have more information than their grandparents. How can grandparents who own less information give useful advice to their grandchildren? Therefore, grandparents have no idea to give useful suggestions to their grandchildren because they cannot receive enough information.
To sum up, we can not deny that grandparents can give useful life advice to their grandchildren from their plentiful experience, on the other hand, we should admit that they do not have ways to obtain enough information to give helpful advice to grandchildren in nowadays.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'depend'
Suggestion: depend
...er, as far as I am concerned, it should depends which kind of advice the grandparents s...
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Line 3, column 952, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'advise' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: helping
...sion on this world can give life advise to help grandchildren to establish their own va...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun ways is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ea may not so helpful because they have less ways to receive information. When grand...
^^^^
Line 5, column 468, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...ar with the ways to receive information in nowadays such as the search engine. Grandchildre...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 261, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...to give helpful advice to grandchildren in nowadays.
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, in addition, kind of, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42744063325 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12139322006 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477572559367 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0650562576 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.263157895 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9473684211 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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