The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The given illustration represents the development of mobile phones through the depiction of an early mobile phone and a contemporary one.

As it can be seen there is a wide range of differences between these two mobiles with the most apparent being the size. The early phone is a lot bigger weighting 150 g with measurements of 130 mm x 50 mm while the contemporary one has a weight of just 70 g and measurement of 90 mm x 40 mm. What both mobiles have in common is the ear phone placed in the upper part of the phone. Moving on, the older phone offers only a black or white display in contrast with the newest model that offers a display of full-color.

The center button of the phones is a function select button but the contemporary phone has a wider variation of function such as email, internet and music player. Lastly, the contemporary phone gives people the opportunity to take photos or videos since a camera with video capability exists above the function select button.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mobile phone and a contemporary one. As it can be seen there is a wide range of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, lastly, while, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 811.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60795454545 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71497582862 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607954545455 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 255.6 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.856382968 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.857142857 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.23603664747 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166393835344 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838623753554 0.103423049105 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062323943851 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131696997307 0.15604864568 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602085479589 0.0819641961636 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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