It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
There is the notion that the rapid development of technology will cause the majority of traditional cultures to be lost. However, I do not completely agree with this statement and I opine that even though some cultures will be inevitably lost there are also numerous cultures that will be enhanced significantly by the advancement of technology.
On the one hand, technological advancement has caused many tradition cultures to be lost. More specifically, it has been proved that cultures that follow a more preserved way of life are those that are the most likely to be lost. The reason why this happens is that technology generally offers a sense of comfort and convenience especially to young people. Young people find comfort behind the screen of a phone without caring about maintaining or being part of cultures that are considered 'obsolete'.
On the other hand, traditional cultures can be highly benefited by technology and its advancement and can even sometimes make the culture more widely known. For instance, several cultural ceremonies can become more entertaining towards people since they can be enhanced by videos and impressive technological sights. What is more, the era of Facebook and Instagram gives people the opportunity to communicate with individuals from all over the world. This leads to the exchange of cultural traits between people all around the globe. Consequently, many cultures have become widely known and expanded due to the advancement of technology and globalization.
In conclusion, even though there is a small number of cultures that will be lost, I believe that the advancement of technology can benefit a culture more and help it improve, become known and expand in any way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Message: Did you mean 'improves'?
Suggestion: improves
... can benefit a culture more and help it improve, become known and expand in any way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, so, even so, for instance, in conclusion, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23104693141 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94855913362 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530685920578 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2812163283 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440694164482 0.244688304435 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182726924761 0.084324248473 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115133014528 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303108295173 0.151304729494 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110096730183 0.056905535591 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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