The argument mentions that the University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all students. This can be a really good initiative and might bring up a lot of changes to society. However, the argument propounded here is found lacking and has several fallacies. It contains several unsubstantiated assumptions.
The argument fails to take into consideration of those who cannot spare eight hours every month. An indigent who works to fulfil his daily needs and to pay his college fees will not be able to spend eight hours every month. An adroit entrepreneur who works on his startup after his college hours would fail to spare time for charitable work.
Additionally, the argument fails to provide a cogent argument about the eight hours per month for nine months is not backed up by proof. It seems like the time is pulled out from nowhere. A person can-do noteworthy and impactful community service in less than eight hours per month and yet, a person who did moderate community service for eight or more hours per month would have fulfilled the graduation requirement whereas the other person would have not.
Further, the argument fails to take into consideration the travail of those who have already done such charitable work. Moreover, charitable work is done in coordination with a local charity which is not on the Dean's list would be unavailing. If the hereto mentioned cruxes are not accounted for the graduation then the implementation of such a rule would be atrocious.
After taking the aforesaid points into account, it can be observed that the argument fails to be compelling at its best and disingenuous at its worst. However, the motive of the argument is sublime--the argument can further be reinforced by incorporating the following suggestions: First of all, those who cannot spend the required time due to unfeigned reasons should be ostracised. Additionally, the eight-hour rule must be backed up by proof. Most importantly, the work previously done before the implication of this rule and those done at charities not included in the Dean's list must also be considered for the graduation requirement.
- Those who see their ideas through regardless of doubts or criticism others may express are the ones who tend to leave a lasting legacy 86
- Undergraduate students majoring in Business or in the Sciences should not be required to take any courses in the Humanities since those courses won t benefit their future careers 50
- All too often companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees such consultants would be unnecessary 83
- Discussing controversial topics with those with contrasting views is not useful because very few people change their mind when questioned about their core beliefs 75
- Science and technology will one day be able to solve all of society s problems 75
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1762 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.977 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.811 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.532 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 282, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...incorporating the following suggestions: First of all, those who cannot spend the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, then, whereas, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13314447592 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9129142275 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498583569405 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5543842676 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.588235294 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1145632809 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441847065412 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893619854349 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0576774670577 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520477842279 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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