No field of study can advance significantly unless it incorporates knowledge and experience from outside that field.
The 21st century is the age of advancements. Not only the advancements in technology but the progress of every field have grown heaps and bounds. Every new day brings about a new experience, bringing about a new change in life. Likewise, these advancements are not only due to development in only a particular field, but an overall enhancement has paved the way for these inventions and developments. So, I agree with the author in saying that no field of study advances on its own, but it requires a combined effort from other fields as well that leads to advancements.
In today's world of rapid growth and progress, every field of study be it science and technology, healthcare services, business organizations, agricultural sector and so on need support from every outside industry for its enhancement or betterment. Consider the field of healthcare facilities. There was a time when the healthcare sector of many countries lacked various facilities like ventilators, electronic equipment,e-healthcare services, etc. But today, due to the integration of healthcare and Data Science or Artificial Intelligence has led to its growth at a rapid speed. With the help of AI, nowadays, we can achieve everything that once we dreamt of. Without the support of these technologies, there would have been far more deaths in the world than there are today. So, in my opinion, the experience and knowledge from an outside field have definitely lead to an advancement in the healthcare sector.
Furthermore, the knowledge and experience from a different field bring about a new opinion to look at things. Also for instance, in the agricultural sector, the advancements of tools and bringing in technology have put a huge impact on this industry. Without these inclusions, we couldn't have imagined completing our work in a lesser amount of time. That is why I feel that the incorporation of outside fields is a necessary and vital part of the development of an industry.
To conclude, in my opinion, every field requires bolstering and incorporations from different works of life to flourish. The correlation or incorporation of the fields will ultimately lead to the advancement and improvement of human life directly or indirectly. It is beneficial for making our lives easy. In doing so, the experience and plenty of knowledge of a wide range of fields is the primary need.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , e-healthcare
...s like ventilators, electronic equipment,e-healthcare services, etc. But today, due to the in...
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Line 3, column 864, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'leaded', 'led'.
Suggestion: leaded; led
...e from an outside field have definitely lead to an advancement in the healthcare sec...
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Line 5, column 111, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... about a new opinion to look at things. Also for instance, in the agricultural secto...
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Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... industry. Without these inclusions, we couldnt have imagined completing our work in a ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ields is the primary need.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, likewise, look, so, well, for instance, i feel, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 388.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15721649485 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22116181876 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502577319588 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6846673471 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.05 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3607067 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106579972716 0.0831039109588 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990448248007 0.0758088955206 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228701261921 0.150359130593 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358253149721 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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