Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
The whole passage provides such a positive vibe as if this continued use of salicylates in our daily food chain is bringing so much wellbeing in our life. No mention of the negative sides of using preservatives in the first place makes these information highly misleading as well as it is spreading a wrong message to the mass people. Under the veneer of treating headache , the author is trying to normalize the usage of salicylates in food chain which may be deleterious to our health.
Any kind of use of chemical preservatives is harmful and we can’t deny the fact that the more we are being commercially developed, the more we are leaning to these things. Many recent studies have shown the presence of carcinogens in our food chain and prolonged use of harmful food preservatives is one of the reasons of this problem. It is undeniable that we still have to use food preservatives but there are many options in them which don’t cause great harm to health. Salicylate which is a drug component for the treatment of headache should’t be taken so often. It will certainly create adverse effects which will be impossible to heal but here we are telling about taking them in each time with our meal.
The author states the positive sides of using salicylates as preservative. Is the author advocating the avaricious businessmen who are willing to do everything for profit? Even harming others’ life? As aspirin has widespread use, it is cheap and so salicylates are cheap, businessmen want to use this more often as a cheap alternative to good preservatives. The author is bragging about decreased headache patients but there is no mention of many more negatives effects we will be facing due to salicylates. This is simply an one sided writing which is actually questionable if it is authentic. This is nothing more than a support to the destruction of human life. Flavor additive is a new step willing to be taken mentioned in the above passage. It is nothing but a commercial move. Artificial flavors are the vital reasons for kidney. liver complexities. This new step is paving the way of health destruction of the citizens of Mentia.
The participation of people in the survey is also questionable. For one time if we consider the decrease of headache patients is true but what about the people who don’t have this problem? They are also taking salicylates. You don’t have a disease and still you are taking medicines. It is a horrible idea to support. The citizens of Mentia may be better than before because of some other reasons but we can’t say it is because of salicylates.
Based on misleading information the author is trying to create a positive impression towards salicylate preservatives and create a favorable market for new flavor additives. This is a biased writing with false information and we demand proper investigation against these kind of health destructing moves taken by the businessmen of Mentia so that the citizens remain safe in future.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 510 350
No. of Characters: 2423 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.752 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.751 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.841 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.791 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.63 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.257 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.257 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
... preservatives in the first place makes these information highly misleading as well as it is spre...
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Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e. Under the veneer of treating headache , the author is trying to normalize the u...
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Line 3, column 523, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...cing due to salicylates. This is simply an one sided writing which is actually que...
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Line 3, column 837, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Liver
...avors are the vital reasons for kidney. liver complexities. This new step is paving t...
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Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... we demand proper investigation against these kind of health destructing moves taken by th...
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Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...Mentia so that the citizens remain safe in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, still, then, well, kind of, as well as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 40.0 19.6327345309 204% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2482.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 506.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90513833992 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91671764316 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45256916996 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.5732737777 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9259259259 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7407407407 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193556512737 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498743341951 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059283091212 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111045629537 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552260091973 0.0628817314937 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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