It is believed that classmates strongly have an influence on students’ academic performance and the way they keep growing emotionally than their teachers. As a matter of fact, I completely agree with this view.
To begin with, it is true that students are mostly motivated by competing with their peers while teachers can only just encourage them in their studies for some aspects. This is because they are provoked to make an attempt to outperform their friends through showing their broad range of knowledge and striving to achieve higher scores. For example, competitions held by schools or teachers promote students’ effort to study harder to catch up with their opponents and receive the reward.
On top of that, students’ emotional development will be enhanced through the acts of establishing relationship among peers. This is because students spend most of their time studying at school so they have the chance to interact with and confide in their classmates as teachers only just bring them needed knowledges but do not take much notice of their innermost feelings. As a consequence, they will be likely not only to control their feelings but also get along with other fellows. In addition, students’ socialization among their friends can make a contribution to their ability to colaborate with others and be more sociable which is vital to each person in the long run.
In conclusion, undergraduates are encouraged to study harder by competing with classmates and grow their relationships. For these outstanding reasons, it is clear that student’s academic achievement and emotional growth are deeply affected by their classmates better than teachers.
- Bullying is a big problem in many schools What do you think are the causes of this What solutions can you suggest 70
- Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children Some people think this can have negative effects on children and should be banned To what extent do you agree or disagree 78
- In the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying What extent do you agree or disagree with this statement 67
- Many things can influence the academic achievement and emotional growth of a student In this regard beers have more of an impact that teachers do To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion 66
- Some colleges encourage students to create businesses while they are still in school Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages 72
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...act, I completely agree with this view. To begin with, it is true that students ...
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...eir classmates better than teachers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, it is true, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 266.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33834586466 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91445292319 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59022556391 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2956238257 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.090909091 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1818181818 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3636363636 5.45110844103 208% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211487090787 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917275772246 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455111206096 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150489110376 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464898797843 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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