In many countries, the most common solution for criminal behaviour is prison but many believe that a better education is more effective.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, people have a great controversy of which approach would be effective to reform offenders: imprisonment or education. Personally, I highly appreciate the measure of education because of these rational reasons.
First of all, education brings back changes in criminals’ minds. It has been said that education makes criminals realize how their wrongdoings aggravate society or even hurt their relatives. Therefore, they might attempt to adjust their behaviors by following the laws in order not to adversely affect their beloved humans as well as to pay their debt to society. Furthermore, educated offenders might become the most appropriate people to talk to the next generations about the dangers of committing a crime. For example, there is an offender who persisted that the purpose of his deviant action was to get his life better. It is obvious that he had no idea how his illegal activity had a harsh impact on innocent people. Till the end, police had to invite a psychologist to go and talk to him. As a result, he realized that his behavior not only worsened his life but also hurt surrounding people, and he decided to accept the punishment.
Secondly, incarceration requires a huge amount of crime cost. In the United States, the government spends almost 70 billion dollars annually to place adults in prison and jails, to confine adolescents who engage in juvenile delinquency, and to supervise 7.3 million individuals on probation and parole. Consequently, dollars which should have meant to pay for public needs like health care, housing, and public assistance are expropriated to nurture antisocial people without predicting whether they will reform or not. On the contrary, if the government investigates education to make certain offenders are acknowledged about rules and laws so that they will not reoffend.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the government should focus on criminals' education rather than merely put them behind bars. By doing so, the amount of money for crime cost can be reduced as well as society can retrieve its good and conscientious citizens.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'criminals'' or 'criminal's'?
Suggestion: criminals'; criminal's
...eve that the government should focus on criminals education rather than merely put them b...
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Line 4, column 263, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve its good and conscientious citizens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19298245614 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88582122799 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634502923977 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3216760367 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0625 5.45110844103 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106791683245 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032452422045 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.028560268305 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0610742329644 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239267913028 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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