You went to the local hospital's emergency department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff. Write a letter to the registrar, complaining about the service you received.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter about the pathetic service I received in an emergency department of such a prestigious hospital.I would like to say it was a horrible experience I ever had.I have a 9-year-old child who had severe stomach pain 4 days before, on Wednesday.When I enquired about a doctor in an emergency,staff at the reception told me no one is available at night.After much requests, and continuous follow-up;they told me to visit an emergency department on the second floor and meet a resident doctor.
To my surprise,even though there were only 2 patients at that time;I had to wait for almost four hours which was a complete shock for us.My daughter's condition was worst and none of them paid any attention to her. Finally after much waiting,a doctor came and treated her.
I would like to mention that please make sure in future,such kind of incidents doesn't happen.It was a question of someone's life and it should not be ignored at any cost.
I hope you will take necessary actions on immediate basis to avoid such incidents.
Yours sincerely,
Klara Jane
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...o had severe stomach pain 4 days before, on Wednesday.When I enquired about a doc...
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...on told me no one is available at night.After much requests, and continuous follow-up...
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...avoid such incidents. Yours sincerely, Klara Jane
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, second, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 906.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 185.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8972972973 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99351136619 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.708108108108 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 16.3608247423 183% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 168.249484067 44.8134815571 375% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 151.0 76.5299724578 197% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8333333333 16.8248392259 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 4.34317383033 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 2.54639175258 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25533222166 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931202536832 0.0766984524023 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531983022069 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109606377423 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594511929941 0.0580467560999 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 8.37731958763 204% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 70.7449484536 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 7.45979381443 185% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 8.71597938144 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 7.59969072165 123% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 8.62886597938 342% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 8.54432989691 164% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.