You went to the local hospital s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and while you were waiting you were constantly ignored by the other

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You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff.
Write a letter to the Hospital Registrar, complaining about the service you received.

Dear Mr Smith,

I am writing to complain about the treatment my daughter and I received when we visited the Emergency department at your hospital two days ago. Although, I like what you have done to the place especially with the expansions and the gardening.

In relation to more specific details of the event, my daughter started complaining about a severe stomach ache at around 2pm. We thought we could manage it by getting some prescribed drugs, but it got worse. So, I had to rush her to your hospital. On arriving at the emergency ward, we were asked to wait for the doctor, even though my daughter was excruciating pain. Nonetheless, we sat and waited.

We waited for over 4 hours without seeing doctor. I asked the receptionist how long it will take for us to see the doctor but she responded rudely and asked us to wait while acting like she did not care at all.
Finally, we saw a doctor and he recommended some tests for my daughter.

I was highly disappointed with the delivery of services by the receptionists and I was hoping that you take further actions to ensure that no other patient feels humiliated and embarrassed the way we felt. This type of staff at the emergency ward is inappropriate and not suitable at all. I humbly request that you take this matter seriously and try to expedite actions against the staff involved.

I hope to get a reply from you regarding the actions you have taken.

Yours faithfully,

Lilian Okoye

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 51, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n to more specific details of the event, my daughter started complaining about a ...
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Line 14, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ons you have taken. Yours faithfully, Lilian Okoye
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, nonetheless, regarding, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 26.3917525773 136% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1212.0 937.175257732 129% => OK
No of words: 257.0 206.0 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71595330739 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69003048046 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 127.690721649 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614785992218 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 370.8 290.88556701 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.13402061856 164% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.838138007 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1333333333 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 4.34317383033 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 1.49484536082 535% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29273632689 0.216113520407 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893719008392 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577012951411 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135111526045 0.12726935374 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385491198739 0.0580467560999 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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