You went to the local hospital s emergency department with your young child who had severe stomach pains You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and while you were waiting you were constantly ignored by the other

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You went to the local hospital's emergency department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff. Write a letter to the registrar, complaining about the service you received.

Dear sir,
I am writing this letter to complain about the negligence of your staff member in city hospital.

Tow days ago, my younger daughter was suffering from stomach pain. I brought her in your hospital. I was very shocked to hear from your head nurse that there is no ward available in the hospital, and they could not admit my daughter right now.

Unfortunately, I had to wait for four hours. Meanwhile, I ask many staff members of your hospital to help my daughter but they ignore us. However, my daughter had to face very difficult time becuase she was suffering from severe stomach pain.

I saw some doctors and staff members are gossiping in the ward. Al last, after 4 hours wait , they admitted my daughter. It was a very difficult time for me and my daughter.

I want you to take strict action about this incident of your staff negligence, and it could save your hospital from further incidents in future.

I hope you consider my request.

Kind regards,
Mark

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...in the ward. Al last, after 4 hours wait , they admitted my daughter. It was a ver...
^^
Line 10, column 135, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ve your hospital from further incidents in future. I hope you consider my request. ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 818.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72832369942 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47889759379 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618497109827 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 240.3 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9256705842 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.9230769231 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3076923077 16.8248392259 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.07692307692 4.34317383033 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.49484536082 468% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256586932577 0.216113520407 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929224841246 0.0766984524023 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541751141552 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13119765384 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579541211235 0.0580467560999 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 64.606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...in the ward. Al last, after 4 hours wait , they admitted my daughter. It was a ver...
^^
Line 10, column 135, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ve your hospital from further incidents in future. I hope you consider my request. ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 818.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72832369942 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47889759379 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618497109827 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 240.3 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9256705842 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.9230769231 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3076923077 16.8248392259 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.07692307692 4.34317383033 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.49484536082 468% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256586932577 0.216113520407 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929224841246 0.0766984524023 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541751141552 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13119765384 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579541211235 0.0580467560999 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 64.606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.