Three years ago, because of flooding at the Western Palean Wildlife Preserve, 100 lions and 100 western gazelles were moved to the East Palean Preserve, an area that is home to most of the same species that are found in the western preserve, though in larger numbers, and to the eastern gazelle, a close relative of the western gazelle. The only difference in climate is that the eastern preserve typically has slightly less rainfall. Unfortunately, after three years in the eastern preserve, the imported western gazelle population has been virtually eliminated. Since the slight reduction in rainfall cannot be the cause of the virtual elimination of western gazelle, their disappearance must have been caused by the larger number of predators in the eastern preserve.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument concludes that the virtual extinction of western gazelles which were brought into east preserve is a sa result of an increased rate of predation. This argument is based on the premise that a lerge number of predators and ‘prey’ live in the eastern preserve and no difference in climate exist between eastern and western preserves. This argument needs to provide more information as it makes a few questionable assumptions.
First it will be important for the author to provide information that proves that the death is not due to sickness which affects the western gazelles more than their eastern counterparts. The eastern gazelles having lived in the east for eons are more acclamatised to the geographic and biological environment, the biological environment includes bacteria and fungus. These organisms might be deadly when entering a new host which is less accustomed to its presence. This issue has occurred with Africans who more resistant to Malaria compared to our European counterparts who identify it as a ‘killer’ disease.
Furthermore an area which experiences flooding requires its inhabitants to have certain adaptations, the western gazelles might be used to large amounts of rainfall and their eastern countrerparts may be more adapted to withstand short periods of drought. The reduced rainfall also has an effect on the kinds of vegetation found in the region. Less comestible vegetation may be present in the eastern preserve compared to the western and this would have a negative impact on the populations of western gazelles. More information will nned to be provided on the availability of suitable food source for western gazelles.
Lastly to prove that predation is indeed responsible for the extirpation of the western gazelles the author would need to provide details which show that more predators are present in the east compared to the west. The west had a predator to prey ratio of one to one, this is a rather tight margin and if the western gazelles were able to thrive under such conditions, it means they are well suited to surviving under harsh predatory conditions. Usually in the wild mass herds of prey usually provide food for a handful of predators.
In conclusion, the argument will need to provide more information on the the above stated points and prove that the eastern gazelle is more suited to survive in areas of predation than the western gazelle.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 1989 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.035 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.757 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.738 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.362 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 2, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...o identify it as a ‘killer’ disease. Furthermore an area which experiences flooding requ...
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Line 4, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... predation is indeed responsible for the extirpation of the western gazelles the ...
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Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ill need to provide more information on the the above stated points and prove that the ...
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Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ill need to provide more information on the the above stated points and prove that the ...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of predation than the western gazelle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, lastly, may, so, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14936708861 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8554380887 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491139240506 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6145088158 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.6 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189717890257 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070921892012 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06163519731 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11669191254 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053601925603 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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