Some people think that outdoor activities bring beneficial for children's development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that the digital era provides various ways for entertainment, in which computer games are more ubiquitous. Although some studies indicate that playing games drives children to be creative, from my perspective, outdoor activities benefit much more than the former. This essay will give some reasons for reinforcing my viewpoint.
In terms of physical health, participating in outdoor activities such as playing sports and camping helps children keep fit and build their muscles. There is merit in experts' affirmation that these kinds of activities encourage their metabolism, develop the immune system, and require a lot of movements for blood circulation. Thanks to the positive effects, children are enabled to improve their health much more than by sitting in front of a blue screen all day long playing computer games.
In addition, children who often go out for exercise tend to have better mental health. Firstly, most sports require players to be involved in a team where they can support, contact, and develop together. By doing this, children have opportunities to enhance their communication skills, teamwork and responsibility. Secondly, outdoor activities navigate kids to improve their confidence and self-motivation. They have to confront with many problems that happen in the matches or teammates that they must attempt to tackle and conquer in a very short time. These harship situations force children to get out of their comfort zones and break through their limits, which benefits them when they get mature.
To recapitulate, I must admit that computer games bring some particular advantages. However, the leverage of outdoor activities outweighs the reasons mentioned above. I strongly reckon that the younger generation should spend more time outside for their comprehensive development.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, in addition, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56583629893 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92259447938 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629893238434 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3810035622 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.333333333 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26446626744 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903153003568 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548314016109 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166264132141 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499713753721 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 346, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me reasons for reinforcing my viewpoint. In terms of physical health, participati...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...een all day long playing computer games. In addition, children who often go out f...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 703, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hich benefits them when they get mature. To recapitulate, I must admit that compu...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 281, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ide for their comprehensive development.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, in addition, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56583629893 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92259447938 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629893238434 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3810035622 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.333333333 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26446626744 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903153003568 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548314016109 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166264132141 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499713753721 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.