One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Over the past few decades, humanity has made great progress in the field of health and healing. Such an improvement allows us to be no longer threatened by many deadly diseases anymore. It is often claimed that this trend is having an adverse impact on our society such as overpopulation. From my perspective, however, the benefits of medical advancement far outweigh its drawbacks.
One primary reason is for good to the development of human society because the society would have more workforce. In the era that medical knowledge was still primitive, the average lifespan of humans was only around 50, which had seriously stalled the pace of development. Numerous great scientists might have made more contributions if they had been given more time. Take Heinrich Hertz who died of illness at 36 as an example.
For those who are against this trend, the most important point is that extending life span could eventually lead to overpopulation and use up natural resources, which is already happened and become one of the world’s biggest problems right now. Nevertheless, these people overlook that the emotions and bonding we humans own. People can spend more time with their loved ones due to longer life expectancy. A direct benefit from this is that grandparents can take care of their grandchildren for their busy parents as both parents in a family have to work. Add to this the elders' precious experiences, and we can make use of them to build a better and prosperous world.
By way of conclusion, although improved medical care gives rise to several troubles, I strongly believe that this improvement can be only conducive to our society. Also, we should never see the elder generation as a burden, and instead, they are a treasure for us.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 371, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...le can spend more time with their loved ones due to longer life expectancy. A direct...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98639455782 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78182222109 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649659863946 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0331236117 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7333333333 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166689889097 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491600796153 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046849348416 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930296307646 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404712559298 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.