Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?
It is believed by certain people that children lack knowledge about works and employments, therefore they think that students should experience works at least once during their studying on campus. From my point of view, this is a great idea that should be implemented since it would give them a better graph about working life, however, I feel that it need to be scheduled properly.
First and foremost, this suggestion might help students broaden their knowledge about our society. If children are given opportunities to experience various works they would have a better insight into adult life. Thus, they might learn to respect their parents, teachers or any working-class members that are working hard to earn living. For example, in Vietnam students are usually dispatched to help the sanitation workers so that they could understand the hard work and reflect on littering. Thus, good behaviours are expected to be increased among students.
Furthermore, after graduation, students are usually struggling to find jobs that do not require experience. The idea of having a short period exposed to the working environment would be a solid solution for this problem. Therefore, many employment issues shall be dealt with in the near future leading to a better society. However, students might get stressed because of the overload of works at school and at work. Thus, I recommend that this short time of working should be operated during summertime when children have much of free time.
In conclusion, while offering the chances to experience the working culture cult would have many benefits, it should be carefully carried out or else it would cause a backfire.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...aden their knowledge about our society. If children are given opportunities to exp...
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Line 5, column 493, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...me of working should be operated during summertime when children have much of free time. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, at least, for example, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2037037037 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68062447938 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592592592593 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8955275187 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.076923077 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215718175196 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780951301436 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054277803107 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13049849536 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486847879591 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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