Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In today's complex world, most people have to work hard from dawn to dusk. So, Parents nowadays do not have enough time to be with their children. Thus, it is a big dilemma for them it is better to spend playing with their child or use this time to focus on their children's school works. I am of the opinion that busy parents must allocate their free time playing with their children. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will express in the following essay.
To begin with, playing games, sports, or other entertaining activities can have a significant impact on children's mental and physical health and decrease their stress after long time school classes or exams. They can rest and enjoy doing their favorite activities with their parents. Also, nowadays, most children do not have enough physical activity. Many children have overweight, so if they can do these activities, it is suitable for their physical health. For example, when I was a child, I spent most afternoons playing games with my mom, and every day we tried new games after school, or she took me to the park, and we cycled for hours. It was a delightful time for me. I learned many new games from my mom's childhood, which I use when َplaying with my cousins. Also, I had stress for my exams those days, and playing with my mom significantly impacted controlling my stress and anxiety. Moreover, I had a healthy body, and rarely did I get sick.
Secondly, playing games with young children and doing their favorite activities can positively affect their grades and school life. In this regard, parents can encourage their children to try hard in school and give high grades in their class, then play children's beloved games. In this way, not only do they encourage their child to study more but also they improve their relationship. For instance, my nephew is interested in playing and watching football. Most of the weekends, his dad takes him to the stadium to watch football, but before going, he should do all his homework's and my nephew does all his tasks in a short time because he does not like to lose this opportunity. In addition, when someone asks him about his best friend, without thinking, he answers his dad.
To sum up, from where I stand, it is better parents spend their free time with their children playing games and sports instead of doing things related to their school tasks for two main reasons. First, children can be mentally and physically healthy. Second, the parents can encourage their children to study more.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...encourage their children to study more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74090909091 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41258751394 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502272727273 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1559755789 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6956521739 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1304347826 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352967891636 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115037496059 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873760244367 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248805001366 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621307568157 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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