The graph below gives information about the percentage of people living in Australia who were born in Asia the UK and other regions

1. The line graph illustrates information about the proportion of people inhabit in Australia who were born in Asia, the UK, and other regions between 1976 to 2011.
It is clear that the percentage of people who were born in Asia was always increased throughout the period. While the UK saw a declining trend. However, the total was overtook Asia, the UK and the other and to also witnessed a slight surge in the end.
Starting at 14% in 1976, the UK has the highest percent of people living in that country. But it continuously declined to reach at 5% in 2011. Likewise the UK, the other country began at 1% is initially ranked just behind the UK's , saw an initial fall from 12% to around 7% in the first 10 years. Between 1986 to 2006, there was a significant growth in the number of residents living in other countries from about 7% to around 14%. During the period from 2006 to 2011 saw a slight decrease in the rate of inhabitants living in other countries from about 14% to around 12%. By contrast, the proportion of people living in Asia began at the lowest point in comparison with the UK and the other. It was around 3% in 1976. From 1976 to 2011, the percent of people living in Asia surged dramatically from about 3% to 15%
Turning to the total, it started at around 23%. Between 1976 to 2001 saw a considerable decline in the proportion of residents from about 25% to around 20%. From 2001 to 2011 witnessed a significant rise in the percent of inhabitant to 25%.

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Average: 6.7 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 109, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...always increased throughout the period. While the UK saw a declining trend. However, ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 168, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'overtaken'.
Suggestion: overtaken
...declining trend. However, the total was overtook Asia, the UK and the other and to also ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Likewise,
...uously declined to reach at 5% in 2011. Likewise the UK, the other country began at 1% i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... is initially ranked just behind the UKs , saw an initial fall from 12% to around ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, likewise, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 33.7804878049 219% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1210.0 965.302439024 125% => OK
No of words: 271.0 196.424390244 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46494464945 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49869126644 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464944649446 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 345.6 283.868780488 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5397522911 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4285714286 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340377986531 0.215688989381 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127750285529 0.103423049105 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135502212464 0.0843802449381 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257550994131 0.15604864568 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.182135306458 0.0819641961636 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 109, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...always increased throughout the period. While the UK saw a declining trend. However, ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 168, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'overtaken'.
Suggestion: overtaken
...declining trend. However, the total was overtook Asia, the UK and the other and to also ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Likewise,
...uously declined to reach at 5% in 2011. Likewise the UK, the other country began at 1% i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... is initially ranked just behind the UKs , saw an initial fall from 12% to around ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, likewise, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 33.7804878049 219% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1210.0 965.302439024 125% => OK
No of words: 271.0 196.424390244 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46494464945 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49869126644 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464944649446 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 345.6 283.868780488 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5397522911 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4285714286 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340377986531 0.215688989381 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127750285529 0.103423049105 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135502212464 0.0843802449381 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257550994131 0.15604864568 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.182135306458 0.0819641961636 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.