The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the passage concludes that shortening the number of working hours will reduce on-the-job accidents and increase productivity. The reason behind this conclusion is based on the assumption that reduced work time will increase the time for sleeping and since the nearby industries have reduced working hours and less percentage of accidents the author assumed that increased work hour is the reason for accidents.
First of all, the working hour might not be the cause of fatigue or sleep deprivation. The workers of the Quiot manufacturing who were the victims of on-the-job accidents might be going through mental disruption because of their family matters or they might have some previous illness related to sleep deprivation and fatigue. Therefore, reduced work hours will not help rather they need treatment or their personal problems need to be solved first. If this is the case then the author’s argument will fall short.
Secondly, though the experts say that fatigue and sleep deprivation are the significant factors contributing to on-the-job accidents, it may not be true for the Quiot manufacturing. It is very likely that the accidents in this particular factory correspond to the unskilled labor force. That means novice workers, because of their lack of skill, might be prone to accidents. Even the working condition of this company might be poorer compared to the panoply industries, which may be the fact behind the accidents. So it is unwise to conclude that adequate sleep will increase production and diminish accidents in the Quiot manufacturing.
Finally, if we consider that adequate sleep will enhance production and limit the number of accidents, how can we be sure that workers will sleep after their work? It is very likely that the extra free hours will be consumed by the workers for another job or for other reasons. And if they do not use the time for sleep they will not get remedy from fatigue and sleep depravity. Hence there will be hardly any development in the current situation. Therefore we can claim that if this is then it will only weaken the author’s argument.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sonal problems need to be solved first. If this is the case then the author’s argu...
^^
Line 7, column 380, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...emedy from fatigue and sleep depravity. Hence there will be hardly any development in...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 449, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...y development in the current situation. Therefore we can claim that if this is then it wi...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 349.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10315186246 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68531674457 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478510028653 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6317959814 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.3125 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114094969845 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420681432659 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357923901604 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808121649452 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333828106222 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sonal problems need to be solved first. If this is the case then the author’s argu...
^^
Line 7, column 380, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...emedy from fatigue and sleep depravity. Hence there will be hardly any development in...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 449, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...y development in the current situation. Therefore we can claim that if this is then it wi...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 349.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10315186246 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68531674457 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478510028653 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6317959814 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.3125 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114094969845 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420681432659 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357923901604 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808121649452 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333828106222 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.