In many countries, people now wear western clothes such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this the case? Is this a positive or negative development?
In this modern era, wearing traditional clothes becomes more unfamiliar in most countries than suits and jeans which is identically western culture. There are several reasons for this debatable topic and I consent to be more disadvantageous points which will be elaborated more below.
Regarding the causes, the western clothes being people’s favourites mostly is due to how massive influence the well-known people wear them. In conjunction with the spread fast-growing trend, suits and jeans also bring formality and simpler look to be chosen based on individuals' current occassions. Furthermore, to wear traditional clothes compared to the preferable ones seems more complicated, not only the way to dress dated constumes but also traditional events should be major consideration. To illustrate, wearing Baju Bodo, which is traditional constume from Indonesia has to represent the married events.
On the other side, this issue could bring drawback including the lost of individuals' national identity. The more people wear the same clothings, the more possible the traditional dress will disappear. Subsequently, the pride of ones' culture would diminish, new generation will barely inherit their original customs. In addition, disrespect value of native traditions might induce the social gap among groups of societies. The modern life style - more and more normalisation of western-types clothes - between young and old people frequently creates more common conflicts (behaviour and manner).
To sum up, traditional-dressed style taken over by western one may result from the great influence of celebrity and the complexity of wearing such style. Besides, I believe that the demerits of this are the disappearance of nationalism and the possibility of provoking conflicts.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...l disappear. Subsequently, the pride of ones culture would diminish, new generation ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, look, may, regarding, so, well, as to, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68045112782 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10957487322 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639097744361 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4349147827 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.230769231 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276433232009 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955775828589 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861707522227 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170347274618 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501323678401 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...l disappear. Subsequently, the pride of ones culture would diminish, new generation ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, look, may, regarding, so, well, as to, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68045112782 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10957487322 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639097744361 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4349147827 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.230769231 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276433232009 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955775828589 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861707522227 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170347274618 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501323678401 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.