You have lost an item of value on a train

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you about the loss of my bag on your train. I take the train to commute to my office every day.

The item is a brown leather bag with the brand name Gucci embossed on the front. Unfortunately, there were lots of valuable items in the bag like my wrist watch and also a considerable amount of money in my wallet. Moreover, my passport, adaptor, mobile charger and some official documents were also inside.

Yesterday, I boarded the 9 o'clock train from Golshahr to Tehran like everyday to reach my office at 10 AM. I put my bag in the overhead space to rest during the rather long journey. I realised that I had forgotten to take my bag while getting off the train but when I came back to the station the train had left already.

I would be thankful if you could inform concerned staff about the loss so that I can get back my bag if it is found on the train. Please contact my cellphone on 00989032532994 for return.

Thanks in advance for your kind cooperation.

Sincerely yours,
Razieh Ahmadi

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Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
... inside. Yesterday, I boarded the 9 oclock train from Golshahr to Tehran like ever...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...lock train from Golshahr to Tehran like everyday to reach my office at 10 AM. I put my b...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... station the train had left already. I would be thankful if you could inform c...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 866.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 193.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48704663212 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49500023551 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626943005181 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4362333403 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.1666666667 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0833333333 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 4.34317383033 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124776264743 0.216113520407 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458062235187 0.0766984524023 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428842641301 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723146890758 0.12726935374 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463828997622 0.0580467560999 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 8.71597938144 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
... inside. Yesterday, I boarded the 9 oclock train from Golshahr to Tehran like ever...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...lock train from Golshahr to Tehran like everyday to reach my office at 10 AM. I put my b...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... station the train had left already. I would be thankful if you could inform c...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 866.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 193.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48704663212 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49500023551 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626943005181 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4362333403 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.1666666667 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0833333333 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 4.34317383033 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124776264743 0.216113520407 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458062235187 0.0766984524023 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428842641301 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723146890758 0.12726935374 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463828997622 0.0580467560999 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 8.71597938144 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.