It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you thing the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, to take a risk regarding to the occupation and private fields is essential for people decisions. I consent to be more advantageous for this interesting topic which will be elaborated in the following paragraph.
To begin with, perhaps, deciding to take a risk in terms of job and personal lives might lead to obtain a thriving career prospect especially for whose occupation interacts with other people such as entrepreneur. The more a business man take a risk, the more odds their business would expand in many places. This could lead increasing profit business and hiring many people. Furthermore, if people remain in the comfort zone, they would not obtain a new experience which is probably useful in the future. Taking a risk could improve not only a new skill but also the way of thinking resulting in becoming a wiser person.
On the flip side, in my point of view, this issue could collapse a business leading to multiplier effect both the owner or the employee. To illustrate, Nokia, a big communication company, which decides to still use their operation system and refuse an android technology in their phone bankrupts because of the wrong decision. In addition, the risk could inflict a mental issue for who is unable to face with the worst case of their decision. In terms of the bad result, they would not only endure a stressful mind, but also harm their harmonic family.
To sum up, while to rake a risk in conjunction with job and private lives could bring demerits to some extent. The high odds of thriving business prospect and attain interpersonal skill seem to me that its merits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 217, Rule ID: MORE_A_JJ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a more business'?
Suggestion: a more business
... other people such as entrepreneur. The more a business man take a risk, the more odds their bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, regarding, so, still, while, in addition, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85144927536 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66553171736 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572463768116 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1010135589 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2307692308 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291798543203 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934224071454 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712320074779 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160883749108 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593541818366 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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