The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Around the world, we can see that a developed country is a country that has a strongly developed education. Therefore, focusing on education is crucial. There are valid arguments for and against governments' investing more in illiterate adults or children. In my opinion, children should be pri-oritized. I will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, children are the future of a country. They are becoming the next working class and the next authorities. Before that, they ought to be trained from an early stage. For example, if our future generations are well educated, they will attain fundamental skills as well as knowledge about vari-ous economic-social aspects, which will improve their productivity at work. As a result, they will produce more benefits for themselves and the country. Second, at a young age, is the stage that has the most advantages for absorbing new knowledge. Consequently, investing in the young will cost less money and time compared to investing in grown-up people. For example, according to the ABC college's science research in Vietnam, children are more open-minded and flexible learners, so their ability to absorb new information is enormous. Thus, raising children's awareness is an ef-fective way to help a nation become more prosperous.
Admittedly, adults are the major labor force who are working to support children. If they improve their education, they may have more opportunities to make more money. However, if a country's goal is to be well-developed, civilized, and modern, future generations should be prepared at the start of their lives.
In conclusion, going through human history, education has attracted the attention of governments. This proves that for the long-term vision of the nation, children should be concentrated on their intellectual development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45614035088 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08271923709 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589473684211 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1738257566 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8421052632 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148500217659 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462421130414 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378750118365 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10346727697 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339664343168 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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