The following is a memorandum from the office of Mayor Harrison Smith Jones.
"In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones plans to build a multi-million dollar subway system. The subway will run through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses serve as the only form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about inconsistent buses, and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally, the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones expects to see an immediate increase in worker productivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville."
The passage gives the notion that once a subway is developed and travel time is reduced worker productivity will improve and therefore the economy will improve. Although there are many transport issues plaguing the city as specified by the author, we are deprived of enough evidence to judge the feasibility of the multi-million dollar subway system. This argument hinges on various unstated assumptions, the veracity of which must be explored in order to solidify the argument.
Firstly we are told that the subway will run through major downtown areas of the city. However, no information is given on whether the downtown area is traffic heavy or not. The author also assumes that the downtown area is where most of the productive work of the city takes place. However, it is entirely possible that the downtown area is filled with small shops and gardens, etc. which have no significant contribution to the economy of the town. It is also possible that the downtown area doesn’t have much congestion and developing a subway there could cause congestion as well as financial losses due to lack of usage by the public.
Next, the author speaks vaguely about the inconsistency and unsafety of the buses that are already running. There has been no evidence to back the assumption that the trains will be safer than the existing buses. Further trains running twenty-four hours a day could well be a waste of money, especially at night or even during times like midday when everyone is busy working. Running a train that is designed for 200 people for just 5-10 passengers is not a big financial loss but also contributes to unnecessary pollution which can cause workers to fall sick and thereby become counterproductive to the town.
Thirdly there has been an assumption that the workers usually come on bikes. There is a huge possibility that the workers actually own cars. It is also possible that the workers prefer the comforts of the car rather than breaking their backs in crowded trains. There hasn’t been any survey nor is a shred of evidence provided that the motorist and even the workers using buses will switch to trains once they start running. If a majority of workers decide against using the subway system, this project could be a huge loss to the economy.
Lastly, the author has made a correlation that people who spend less time in traffic have higher worker productivity. Further, it assumes that higher worker productivity will improve the economy of the town. Both these points are not supported by any evidence, past data, or relevant study. There is a high probability that other negative factors are impeding the increase in worker productivity.
To conclude, the benefits that can be bought forth by a new all-day round subway system are innumerable as mentioned in the above passage. However, the assumptions made and the correlations drawn are unwarranted and baseless with no evidence being cited. Without accessing all the data, the validity of the argument cannot be established and therefore the feasibility of this new subway system cannot be justified.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2524 1500
No. of Different Words: 251 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.882 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.613 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.542 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.03 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
... will be safer than the existing buses. Further trains running twenty-four hours a day ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 393, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'train'.
Suggestion: train
... the workers using buses will switch to trains once they start running. If a majority ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2591.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 515.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03106796117 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66947145675 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 204.123752495 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504854368932 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 826.2 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7457830206 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.64 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120627977532 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0334243036103 0.0743258471296 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444341190275 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0627032351057 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382763101181 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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