"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
The arguments passed by the author in their argument to get the use of cell phones on sidewalks banned are not cogent enough. Firstly the author makes an assumption that the two cities of Centerville and Middletown will react similarly to the ban which has not been justified. Further, the author assumes a cause-and-effect relationship between the ban on cellphone usage on sidewalks and safety.
Building upon the first argument that is, it's not necessary that Middletown and Centerville are similar. There is a possibility that the sidewalks of Middletown are wider and have lesser obstructions on there. For example, it's entirely possible that Middletown also doesn't allow the opening of shops on the sidewalk thereby giving pedestrians more space to walk so they don't crash into each other. It's also possible that the city has less number of people who use vehicles and therefore the crowded sidewalks led to more accidents which were reduced when the ban was introduced.
Even then, the argument needs to address the behavior of the city people of the two cities. It may happen that, Middletown's people, being educated, are docile and show their respect for any imposed law or ban upon them while the people of Centerville are rebellious and stubborn: and show no respect for the law. So, before concluding that the ban would be successful in Centerville it must be made clear that the city people are going to show their respect and keep themselves away from using cell phones while on the sidewalk.
Secondly, the author is assuming a cause-and-effect relation which is that use of mobile phones leads to sidewalk rage. It is very possible that the ban on mobile phones just caused fewer reported incidents as most people didn't have proof which could have been a video recording on their phones. Further, the ban on cell phones might have led to people losing precious time at work and being forced to work longer as a result leading to no time for registering complaints or even fighting with other pedestrians.
In conclusion, it can be said that the two cities might not be the same and what was successful in one city might be found failed for the other one. So, in order to become a more persuasive one, this argument needs to address some of its unwarranted assumptions and answer some questions, otherwise, the argument is not good enough.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1923 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.76 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.012 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... entirely possible that Middletown also doesnt allow the opening of shops on the sidew...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 371, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... pedestrians more space to walk so they dont crash into each other. Its also possibl...
^^^^
Line 7, column 223, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...fewer reported incidents as most people didnt have proof which could have been a vide...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 401.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90274314214 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66287694303 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501246882793 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6105881469 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.066666667 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7333333333 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.075664533272 0.218282227539 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337223406963 0.0743258471296 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0270775750247 0.0701772020484 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.046338034995 0.128457276422 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335290226182 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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