“Some people think that getting a degree from a university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead.”
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Which band on the IELTS scale can the essay below get? What can be improved?
Some people argue that a university studying and knowledge from it are the only one way to build a good career, however others think a real work experience is more useful, skills are giving from life cases are the best lessons. In this essay it will discussed both sides of the problem. I absolutely believe a degree from university is necessary for getting a well-paid job.
On the one hand, an university gives you special knowledges and important skills. Many information which people can have thanks to their professors is essential for their future career. For instance, a person cannot have job in medicine if he/she did not study in a special university, this person has not information about people's health problem, structure of body and organs.
On the other hand, a lot of university have not opportunities to give practice for their students. Getting a degree, people have not real experience, they have knowledge but they do not understand how this datas work in life's situations. Real working experience gives many useful skills which can be used in a working place. For example, people getting practice easy find a gob, because many employers do not want to have workers, who have not experience.
In conclusion, there are two positions in our world: a degree from university is necessary for building a future career or getting real work experience is more important. I completely believe that giving a high-quality education is the best way to become a great specialist on labor market.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... essay below get? What can be improved? Some people argue that a university stud...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'discuss'
Suggestion: discuss
...the best lessons. In this essay it will discussed both sides of the problem. I absolutely...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 18, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ting a well-paid job. On the one hand, an university gives you special knowledges...
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Line 4, column 82, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: Much; Little
...pecial knowledges and important skills. Many information which people can have thank...
^^^^
Line 4, column 82, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: Much information; A good deal of information
...pecial knowledges and important skills. Many information which people can have thanks to their p...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...eer. For instance, a person cannot have job in medicine if he/she did not study in ...
^^^
Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ions. Real working experience gives many useful skills which can be used in a wor...
^^
Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or example, people getting practice easy find a gob, because many employers do n...
^^
Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mple, people getting practice easy find a gob, because many employers do not wan...
^^
Line 5, column 447, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'experienced'.
Suggestion: experienced
... not want to have workers, who have not experience. In conclusion, there are two positio...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1320.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94382022472 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72501188949 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554307116105 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1187281326 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2857142857 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31436383065 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107429425112 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708440035179 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181042357907 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124085226842 0.056905535591 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... essay below get? What can be improved? Some people argue that a university stud...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'discuss'
Suggestion: discuss
...the best lessons. In this essay it will discussed both sides of the problem. I absolutely...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 18, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ting a well-paid job. On the one hand, an university gives you special knowledges...
^^
Line 4, column 82, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: Much; Little
...pecial knowledges and important skills. Many information which people can have thank...
^^^^
Line 4, column 82, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: Much information; A good deal of information
...pecial knowledges and important skills. Many information which people can have thanks to their p...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...eer. For instance, a person cannot have job in medicine if he/she did not study in ...
^^^
Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ions. Real working experience gives many useful skills which can be used in a wor...
^^
Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or example, people getting practice easy find a gob, because many employers do n...
^^
Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mple, people getting practice easy find a gob, because many employers do not wan...
^^
Line 5, column 447, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'experienced'.
Suggestion: experienced
... not want to have workers, who have not experience. In conclusion, there are two positio...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1320.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94382022472 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72501188949 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554307116105 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1187281326 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2857142857 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31436383065 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107429425112 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708440035179 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181042357907 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124085226842 0.056905535591 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.