Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The author concludes that the Palean basket are not unique to Palea village. To support his claim, the author gave an example, about how the archaeologists have found the Palean basket in the Lithos village. This argument is not persuasive as it assumes lots of things.
Firstly, the author claims that the Paleans could not a crossed the Brim river are it was very deep and broad and to cross them they would need boats. It might happen that due to natural calamity like floods ,the boats which were in the river would have sailed away and they archaeologists may have not found it. It could also happen that the boat could be broken and the wood have been destroyed or buried into the soil.
Secondly, it could have happen that there could be a bater system between the Lithos and Palea. In bater system the village used to trade by giving one thing from their village in exchange of other. Unless, a strong proof is that there was no relation between the two village the author cannot claim that the baskets were not unique to Palea village.
Thirdly, it could happen that due to some natural disaster the woven basket from the Palea village have been transported to the Lithos village. The author has not mention how many woven basket have they found in the Lithos village. If the only one or two were present than it could be due to some natural calamity.
Fourthly, it could have happen that the Brim river would only be deep during the monsoon and during the summer it would not be so much deep. The author has not mention that during which months the river were deep, we cannot assume that it was deep all round the year. It could be a case that during summer the water was not deep and the people could have cross it without the help of a boat.
Unless, the author gives us proof about all the possibility which were discuss earlier are wrong, it would not be right to accept the authors' claim, about the woven basket, that they were not unique to Palea village. To make author points stronger, the author should provide us with stronger examples and facts
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1656 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.416 4.6
Word Length SD: 1.933 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 50 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 18 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 7 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.752 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.384 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.176 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 208, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...that due to natural calamity like floods ,the boats which were in the river would ...
^^
Line 3, column 25, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...nto the soil. Secondly, it could have happen that there could be a bater system betw...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rom their village in exchange of other. Unless, a strong proof is that there was no re...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 164, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'mentioned'.
Suggestion: mentioned
... the Lithos village. The author has not mention how many woven basket have they found i...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 25, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...ral calamity. Fourthly, it could have happen that the Brim river would only be deep ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'mentioned'.
Suggestion: mentioned
...not be so much deep. The author has not mention that during which months the river were...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[3]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'crossed'.
Suggestion: crossed
... was not deep and the people could have cross it without the help of a boat. Unless...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 72, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'discussed'.
Suggestion: discussed
...of about all the possibility which were discuss earlier are wrong, it would not be righ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 375.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52266666667 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.00781406842 2.78398813304 72% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421333333333 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.0 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.261444214 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7647058824 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94117647059 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207523694019 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805689155048 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523315618132 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123138400311 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547064494164 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.5979740519 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.32208582834 81% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 98.500998004 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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