Older people often choose to spend money on themselves (e.g. on holidays) rather than save money for their children after retirement. Is this a positive or negative development?
Spending money on themselves (e.g. on holidays) is frequently chosen by older people rather than saving money for their younger generations after work-leave. I will deliberate how this view contributes greater disadvantages which will be explained in the forthcoming paragraph.
On the one side, perhaps, the demerit of budgeting retirement fund on themselves is that monthly billing of fresh graduates fail to be fulfilled since they are financially independent yet. Instead of the support children should draw to achieve future career, they obviously acquire parent’s help to avoid them from social insecurity. Moreover, youngsters who lack support from their parents tendentiously face failure syndrome. Besides hard times they have been through, dealing with financial issues forces them to struggle for better life. For instance, without pension fund directed to their children, this frequently inflicts depressed even worse rejection sensitive dysphoria.
On the flip side, we should highlight some merits of this issue that older people have earned the right of long-term working which should be spent for pleasure activities. Apart from raising self-respect, they should gain the best quality of life (health and consumption). Proved by the journal of the British Geriatrics Society, focusing on a joyful life promotes positive effects in older adults. Moreover, being prone to long-term health cost, they may financially be protected from serious diseases such as diabetes and cardiovascular. Therefore, their life expectancy will be improved without worrying about financial hardship to pay the hospital bills and thus achieving close-knit family.
In brief, despite the potential advantages this issue may prompt, I would contradict that spending retirement fund on oneself induces children’s financial problem and afflicts poor mental health.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, e.g., if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, apart from, for instance, in brief, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80291970803 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8284930538 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.675182481752 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8111253249 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.307692308 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247056744567 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823484741744 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131466947353 0.0667982634062 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164596157105 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128586815682 0.056905535591 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.36 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.61 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, e.g., if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, apart from, for instance, in brief, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80291970803 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8284930538 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.675182481752 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8111253249 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.307692308 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247056744567 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823484741744 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131466947353 0.0667982634062 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164596157105 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128586815682 0.056905535591 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.36 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.61 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.