Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.
Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays children love to spend their free time on their smartphones. I believe that there are some reasons why young people do it very often and this has both benificial and detrimental impacts on them.
There are several reasons why children spend hours each day on their phones. Firstly, there are a lot of interesting and engaging things in the Internet that make chidren constantly being attracted. For example, online games create a enchanting world to everyone, particularly children, who can do a lot of things with it. They can do everything they want in the virtual world and it is the most important factor that a pastimes cannot provide. Secondly, social media allows children to communicate with people around the world, they can talk and share their common interests easily. Finally, it is convenient and easy to access because these days children have to learn a lot of things in school and they do not have much time to relax and enjoy other activities in the real world, so using a smartphone to chat with friends or play a game are more comfortable and convenient.
I believe that using smartphones could have both positive and negative impacts on children. On the one hand, it may be beneficial for teenagers to use their phones to learn online. Although people usually see phones as a tool to relax, it can also be a power device to support learning process. Futhermore, using phones frequently can help children to develop their technological skills that are very important in the modern world. On the other hand, let teenagers spend hours online may have some drawbacks. When people interact too much on the Internet, they tend to disconnect with the real life and this leads to poor communication. Another disadvantage is health problems, children who spend a lot of time to see computer screen can have some issues related to eyes or motion like obesity.
In conclusion, smartphones are a useful tool to connect with the world and there are various reasons why children like to spend time on that. I believe that it is better to take advantage of benefits from this technology and avoid the nagetive things it can bring.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 232, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...acted. For example, online games create a enchanting world to everyone, particula...
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Line 2, column 418, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a pastime' or simply 'pastimes'?
Suggestion: a pastime; pastimes
...nd it is the most important factor that a pastimes cannot provide. Secondly, social media ...
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Line 4, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...avoid the nagetive things it can bring.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8583106267 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63294508579 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514986376022 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8177884647 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.882352941 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275665054903 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936711767574 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697888001274 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185611348798 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434959008902 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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