Children obessed with playing computers. Do the advantages outweight the disadvantages?
Due to the acceleration of the internet, many children todays are immersed themselves into playing computer games and unintentionally neglect the significant role of sports. From my perspective, I suppose that this trend is definitely a negative development and I will demonstrate the reasons behind in this essay.
Initially, the preliminary reason why children are obsessed with playing computer games is that the thrilling and fascination of the game. To be more specific, many game manufacturers release games that are well suited for children’s psychology in various aspects: characters’ images, the usage of the characters. When children complete a mission in one game, they can be rewarded an amount of money in game that can generate the excitement and eagerness of the players. Additionally, when playing computer games children somehow transform themselves into the character that they control which can boost the confidence and also with the stimulation of the children.
On the one hand, undeniable that playing games can bring so many beneficial to our health if we know instinctively how to use it in a moderate way. Playing games can sharpen our mind as we have to plan the method and also strategy precisely that can lead us to success in one mission. On the other hand, I suppose that the excessiveness amount of time playing computer games can be detrimental to children’s health. Firstly, children who are spending too much time on the screen are likely to be exposed to diabetes and problem related to eye sights. Sitting in front of the computer, children have tendency not to exercise regularly that can lead to overweight. Besides, the moisture of the eyes have been reduced significantly if we do not know the way to take care of ourselves. Secondly, computer games obsession can directly take a toll on children’s psychology. When children play game FPS, many children have vulnerable mind are being mistaken between the world in game and the reality that they use gun to shoot their family members and other people outside.
All things considered, I suppose that playing computers can be beneficial to chidren in moderation and can be detrimental due to the excessiveness amount of time being exposed to the screen. Children should be instructed how to play games in right ways to avoid encountering some problems related to their health and others.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a moderate way" with adverb for "moderate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... if we know instinctively how to use it in a moderate way. Playing games can sharpen our mind as ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesights'.
Suggestion: eyesights
...osed to diabetes and problem related to eye sights. Sitting in front of the computer, chil...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, i suppose, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15167095116 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9630636792 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501285347044 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.561860934 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.25 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6875 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202973173747 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876056400728 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628065445602 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133942258116 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349394269329 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a moderate way" with adverb for "moderate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... if we know instinctively how to use it in a moderate way. Playing games can sharpen our mind as ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesights'.
Suggestion: eyesights
...osed to diabetes and problem related to eye sights. Sitting in front of the computer, chil...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, i suppose, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15167095116 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9630636792 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501285347044 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.561860934 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.25 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6875 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202973173747 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876056400728 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628065445602 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133942258116 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349394269329 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.