In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In some cultures, and countries, educational systems encourage children to try hard because they think it is just way to achieve children to their goals. In my opinion, although this creates a sense of competition between children, it can follow other negative affects such as jealously, hate and depression if they cannot achieve their goals.
On the one side, it is very good that by this issue children have to try hard. They understand they without attempt no one cannot reach to his/her aim. They believe every thing can possible just should have enough try. In addition, this issue can play a critical role in future’s children and make them stand on own feet. Not only can they solve their problems independently but also it can shape a strong person of them.
On the other side, educational systems and parents should notice to negative effects that can appear in long-term. Jealously is one of the minuses affects that are very harmful for a child in his/her earlier years. It can create a sense of hate inside every child toward other who are in competition with the child. Whereas, in most cases lead to depression when they could not reach their aims.
Finally, these negative effects can eliminate by a good education structure which parents and schools must follow it. hence, I think in some cultures that this subject is important their people are very successful than other countries like Japan.
In conclusion, delivering this message to children has many positive aspect in their life that can appear in their adult
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... who are in competition with the child. Whereas, in most cases lead to depression when ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, so, whereas, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1282.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93076923077 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46278814432 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561538461538 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9457448222 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5714285714 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327881387015 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112867855246 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079023201651 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178770291777 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106217149633 0.056905535591 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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