The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The two pictures compare the layout of a school as it was in the year 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024.
It is clear that the main change for 2024 involves the addition of a new school building. The school will then be able to accommodate a considerably larger number of students.
In 2004, there were 600 students attending the school, and the two school buildings were separated by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field. By 2024, it is expected that there will be 1000 students and a third building will have been constructed. Furthermore, the plan is to join the two original buildings together to make a shorter path that links the buildings only.
As the third school building and a second car park will be built on the site of the original sports field, the new, smaller sports field will need to be laid. A new road will also be built from the main entrance to the second car park. Finally, no changes will be made to the main entrance and the original car park.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, second, so, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 827.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44623655914 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36320138308 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494623655914 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 233.1 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2066953579 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8888888889 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244132347815 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111138588123 0.103423049105 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956085757572 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18010338424 0.15604864568 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831100660684 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.67 8.06136585366 83% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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