Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The crucial role of the education is not merely providing facts but also inculcating the empirical experience and innovation among students. Judging scholars based on the naïve scores suck to the hell. Every homo sapiens out there is peculiar in their own way. It’s not fair to judge the fish based on their tendency to climb the tree. The motive of scoring the higher grades, plunges the efficiency of the students in various ways.
Firstly, mere factual knowledge diminishes the critical and analytical potential of the students. In most of the developing countries like India, the education system is feeble. The pattern for the examination and the system never instigates and encourages the critical thinking among the students. Even in most of the schools, scoring the highest mark is considered to be a great accolade. This orthodox mind set must be bowdlerized. The higher secondary education in India really sucks. Here are the reasons, the primary focus of teachers, parents, students is to ace the highest score. So, the subjects which were to be enjoyed now become a cardinal source of frustration. Most of the students follow the blue print of the weightage of the questions from each lesson for preparing their exams. This in turn, plunges the complete motto of the education .At the culmination, the students, instead imbibing the knowledge for empirical purpose, they are trained to score grades monotonous to the lion trained by the ring master.
Additionally, with the education system having their cardinal focus on only grades, definitely, nadir in their progress. The employment rate would be drastically plunged if the students are allowed to compete with the other students from other countries whose primary goal on the education is to imbibe the novelty. Statistically, India is facing such a crisis. Every one of the Indian parents wants their children to be either doctor or engineer. Choosing fields other than doctor or engineer is always considered as a sin in India. Corollary, the quality of the education is demanding the pivotal source. Most of the students, beside working for the knowledge, started to work for their grades. As a result, they do taste success in their academics but miserably fails in their carrier. This is the cardinal reason for copious failures in technical innovations and in medical practices.
Finally, the changes in the society always bud from the home. It is the pivotal in cumber of the parents to bowdlerize their child’s notion towards education. Government should also take measures to frame the system, where the priority is given to empirical knowledge beside the factual one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, really, second, so, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17401392111 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70626354635 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53596287703 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9281212751 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5925925926 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.962962963 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.62962962963 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0796626007103 0.243740707755 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0198826011672 0.0831039109588 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0244123960537 0.0758088955206 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0411128652256 0.150359130593 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323928347022 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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