Considering that universities and colleges are meant for educational purpose, I don't agree with the view that sports and social activities are the same important as the classes.
Of course, it's nice to demonstrate not only high grades but something in addition to it, for example, to be gifted in some of the sports. But this option goes as a second, supplementary one, it should not become a major one because the main purpose to attend the university is to gain the knowledges in selected field. Hence, all financial support should go for the main purpose which is education, not a football game. Treating of the sport as such type of major means that individual is just in wrong school.
The degree which school issues in the end gives some certain level of assurance that individual received needed knowledges and proved that passing the exams. When sportive achievements receive same level of importance in parallel with academic subjects it makes the whole educational system concerned as it's not clear anymore if someone with the law school degree is a good lower or a gifted soccer player.
Of course, participation in sport or social activities is very important part of development of a students as a personalities, and variety of such classes should be there together with financial support. But it would be plain wrong to give them same importance as to main activities - subject related classes. And each student should understand that not to loose the focus in the studying process and not to forget what was the purpose to attend the university.
To support these statements I have an actual example: a friend of mine was studying in the university which had a brilliant soccer team, which was well known among other colleges and universities, and every student was proud of it. Then the financing was needed in the middle of the season and management decided to spend a funds for the library regular maintenance on the team's needs. Team won the season, it was announced everywhere on local media, and university gained the popularity and seemed to be attractive for new applicants. But at the same time, the lack of budget for the library caused the deficit of books which made students to study together using one book, for some of them the shortage cause the delay in deadlines and lower marks. As a result of this abnormal situation substantial percent of students of second and find years of study shifted to different colleges. And such a massive move out affected the college statistics as well and resulted in few pints rating decrease. This story shoes what happens when the focus is lost and priority goes to side activities instead of main ones.
Summarizing all above said, I'd say that despite the importance of social activities and sports for student's lives, main priority should remain with core activities which are studies, and studies, and studies because people attend the universities for the functional knowledges and degrees, and not for a spending a pleasant time which of course should be there as well but only on supplemental basis.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, second, so, then, well, as to, for example, in addition, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2569.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94990366089 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69329583515 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499036608863 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.5132077933 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.722222222 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8333333333 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187888324398 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598142931629 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601918050381 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115605033088 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049637848075 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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