Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving
over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to
areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least
some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer
to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer
populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming
trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline
in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old
migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate
the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the
argument.
Global warming is blatantly one of the factors for animal extinction but it is not the only case. Number of animals in a specific habitat depends on many things such as available food source, relatively comforting weather, less disturbance etc. It seems plausible to blame only one reason for the whole situation depending on the comments of unreliable sources. Proper investigation has to be done to reach to a conclusion about the decrease of arctic deer in arctic regions.
Temperature increase due to global warming is a burning question now. Though we are talking about it to increase social awareness but we are circumscribed only to listen about it because practically we are doing nothing. Scientists already warned us about 1 degree celsius temperature increase in the past decade due to global warming. Arctic regions aren’t excluded from that. Ice bergs are melting which hindered arctic deer for natural migration. Any change in the age old pattern can cause adverse effect on animals. So ice melting can be deleterious for arctic deer which caused the downward tendency in the number of deer. But this is just a common sense applied by the evil hunters to divert the whole situation. So this is nothing but a fallacy.
Instead of perusing the passage, we came to a conclusion which is illogical. We can see the reports were taken from the local hunters which is not a reliable information to trust blindly. Deer hunting is a very profitable business and it is restricted in many countries. Avaricious local hunters can be involved in deer hunting secretly. As a result deer populations are declining. If statements had been taken from unbiased sources, it could be trusted to analyze the situation.
On the other hand, available food sources can be a factor as we all know dishonest people are cutting down trees for their own interest. Arctic deer are dependent on the plants on which they feed. Because of deforestation, their food sources can be affected badly which can cause the decline.
With a blinkered outlook, this though provoking case can’t be solved. We can’t deny the universal truth, global warming. But that doesn’t mean we have to overlook all other reasons. First we have to stop trusting these two faced people and go deeper into the issue. We have to look for the hidden deer hunters as well as the tree hunters. They have to be taken under the boundary of law and proper environment has to be created for the arctic deer to keep them safe from now on. Otherwise there will be a time when we will lose them forever.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 440 350
No. of Characters: 2071 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.58 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.707 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.546 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.265 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.262 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.262 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n be involved in deer hunting secretly. As a result deer populations are declining...
^^
Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...tic deer to keep them safe from now on. Otherwise there will be a time when we will lose ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, well, as to, such as, talking about, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85159817352 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63197650189 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534246575342 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0744187491 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.275862069 119.503703932 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1034482759 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.62068965517 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167144301301 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514903584606 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697908619971 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102897332264 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387428943758 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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