The commercial airline industry in the country of Freedonia has experienced impressive growth in the past three years. This trend will surely continue in the years to come, since the airline industry will benefit from recent changes in the Freedonian society: incomes are rising, most employees now receive vacation time, and interest in travel is rising, as shown by an increase in media attention devoted to foreign cultures and tourist attractions.
Write a response in which you will discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The writer concludes that Freedonian airline will continue to experience growth as a result of the major positive trends in the economy. He backed up his statement by going further to mention evidences to support his conclusion like: rising wages, employees having more vacation time and increased interest rate in travel indicated by media coverage of foreign lands and tourism. At a first glance, these evidences may seem likely to cause or influence the growth of the Freedonian airline industry. However, the author relies on unsupported assumptions about the stability of the economic trends. Therefore, his argument is flawed and unconvincing.
First, the writer assumes the positive economic trends will continue, he also assumes that the increased income rates will directly translate to people using their discretionary income to travel and not on other things like food, shopping, investments, benevolence etc. Furthermore, the writer also assumes that those that like to travel will want to travel by air, he completely ignores the fact that, there are other means of transportation that people enjoy as well. For example, I know for a fact that some people prefer to travel by road, because they just want to enjoy the breeze and appreciate scenic views of nature. Moreover, it is relatively cheaper than air. On the other hand, some people prefer travelling by water, they find it exciting to travel by water and the love the serene and peaceful connection with water bodies.
Additionally, the writer provides no evidence suggesting that the increased media coverage of foreign cultures and tourist attraction is due to an increased interest level in traveling by air. The author fails to understand that there might not be any link between the increase in media attention assigned to promoting foreign cultures and tourism and peoples' interest in traveling by air; their attention to these issues may have been based on assumptions that people are now more interested in travel-related content. Unless there are stronger evidences that the increase in media attention to tourism and the likes are linked to the peoples' increased interests in traveling, then writer's assumptions are invalid.
In conclusion, the writer is not necessarily mistaken in stating that the positive economic trends will influence the growth of Freedonian airline. After all, those are factors that directly or indirectly affect the prospering of a commercial airline industry. However, to support the assertion that these trends will be stable enough to lead to the growth of the airline, the writer must provide more conclusive evidences to show that these positive economic trends will continue to influence people to travel, and not just by any means but by air. Without such evidence, there is no proof that Freedonian airline will continue to experience impressive growth in future.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2376 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.188 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.679 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.161 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 662, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ontinue to experience impressive growth in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, after all, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2430.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 458.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3056768559 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73750718299 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473799126638 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.0013256525 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.941176471 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9411764706 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88235294118 5.70786347227 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13696063608 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597610376819 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784615245029 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102595272763 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914900597931 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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