Progress should be the aim of any great society. People too often cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and acting because they enjoy feeling comfortable and fear the unknown.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you either agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways to which the statement might or might not be true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Nelson Mandela once said and I quote, ‘Courage is not the absence of fear, but the triumph over it. The brave man is not the one who does not feel afraid, but he who conquers fear’. Fear is a state of mind that is not uncommon to everyone, it impedes success and kills dreams, even before attempting a trial. The prompt recommends that for progress in any society to take place, people should learn to challenge themselves and stop sticking to the conventional ways of doing things. In my opinion, I couldn’t agree more with this suggestion and argue that we need to be dauntless and seek new and better ways of doing things in order to make progress as a society for two reasons in which I will explore in this essay.
To begin, nothing great ever comes out of the comfort zone, sticking to methods of doing things that we are more than comfortable with, doesn’t give room for progress. Take for instance, Abraham Graham Bell who invented the telephone in the 1870s, his invention served as a faster and a more convenient means of disseminating information as opposed to posting handwritten letters. In 1973, Martin Cooper, a Motorola researcher and executive produced the first mobile phone, which was a tremendous improvement on telephones, as people could now move about and still be able to communicate. Innovations on communication devices have rapidly and continually improved over the years because these men have challenged traditional means of communication, they believed there had to be an alternative and refused to get comfortable with writing letters then waiting for months for it to be delivered, hoping the letters do not get lost in transit. Similarly, if all the inventors were too comfortable and let their fear of failure hold them back from realizing their dreams, we would probably be writing letters till date. Imagine a world without these technological advancements? Imagine if they weren’t courageous enough to make a difference and improve on our world? Finally, imagine how totally different our lives would be from what it is now?
Furthermore, fear of the unknown does to humans makes us doubt our potentials and dreams, it fills our minds with uncertainty. It prevents us from realizing possible positive outcomes and from understanding that we are only failures when we don’t try and not when we fail. A reporter once asked Thomas Edison, “how did it feel to fail 1000 times?” Edison replied, I didn’t fail 1000 times. The lightbulb was an invention with 1000 steps. Great success is built on failure, frustration, even catastrophe.” This quote is from a great man who invented the incandescent light bulb in 1800s. Undoubtedly, it must have taken this man a truck full of courage to have failed this many times and still be tenacious. He built on the works of his rivals, Henry Woodward and Matthew Evans, who sold their patent to him because their efforts towards commercializing their lamps were futile. Additionally, failing is an inevitable event on the journey to success, but if we don’t overcome it, how can we make progress as a society? What would you attempt to do if you knew you would not fail? When we start to see things differently and take our failures as opportunities for learning in disguise, then we can make progress.
Ultimately, it can be observed that great men and women that brought by change and development in the society have done that by facing the fear of the unknown and refusing to stick to the obsolete ways of doing things. They refused to get comfortable and accept that things cannot be improved upon. As individuals in the society, we should understand that these people were constantly faced with fear just like we are on a daily basis, they were also presented with the same choice to sit back at home and not try to make a difference, despite all these, they didn’t stop trying. With all these being said, I couldn’t agree more that progress should be the objective of any society and it can be achieved when individuals challenge themselves to do phenomenal things by getting out of their comfort zones.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 814, Rule ID: COMFORTABLE_WITH_VBG[1]
Message: Use simply 'comfortable writing'.
Suggestion: comfortable writing
...to be an alternative and refused to get comfortable with writing letters then waiting for months for it ...
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Line 5, column 248, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...that we are only failures when we don’t try and not when we fail. A reporter once asked...
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Line 5, column 504, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '“' seems to be missing
... failure, frustration, even catastrophe.” This quote is from a great man who inve...
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Line 5, column 578, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1800s'.
Suggestion: in the 1800s
...ho invented the incandescent light bulb in 1800s. Undoubtedly, it must have taken this m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, similarly, so, still, then, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 33.0505617978 239% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 58.6224719101 150% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3419.0 2235.4752809 153% => OK
No of words: 699.0 442.535393258 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8912732475 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.14184870769 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77336917169 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 349.0 215.323595506 162% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499284692418 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 1035.0 704.065955056 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0503212389 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.62962963 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8888888889 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210967886184 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054090502606 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448912223366 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137913780466 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363899008718 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 100.480337079 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.