During the past year,Alta Manufacturing had thirty percent more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts believe that a significant contributing factor in many on-the-job accidents is fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Alta and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that our employees will get adequate amounts of sleep.
The argument claims that Alta Manufacturing should shorten each of the three work shifts by one hour to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents and thereby increase productivity.In order to support the recommendation the author point out that Alta Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries,where the working hours was 1 hour less.He also cities that the fatigue and sleep deprivation are significant contributing factor in many on-the-job accidents.The argument is not entirely logically convincing, since it ignores certain crucial assumptions.
The author highlights the point that during the past year,Alta Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries.This is not fully convincing as the author has not mention about the number of workers working in both the Industries.Their may be a chance that the number of workers working in Alta Manufacturing are by far more than the number of workers working in nearby Panoply Industries.The data provided by the author is limited to one year and their is a chance that Panoply Industries had more accidents than Alta Manufacturing the year before that and it is not certain that Alta Manufacturing face more accidents most of the years.
The author assumes that the fatigue and sleep deprivation are significant contributing factor in many on-the-job accidents.It is not fully convincing as the author fails to point the other significant contributing factor that might have contributed to on-the-job accidents.For example, their may be a chance that Alta Manufacturing safety measures and standards are not up to the mark as it should have been and many accidents occur due to that or the training that is provided to the workers before assigning the task may not be sufficient to teach the how to deal with the work environment and avoid accidents.Even their is a chance that Panoply Industries has got safer work environment and better training.
The author also assumes that reducing the number of on-the-job accidents will increase productivity but the author has not provide any evidence that how on-the-job accidents and increasing of productivity are related to each other. Productivity may depend upon many other factors like the availability of raw materials,number of workers working in the manufacturing unit,skill of the workers working and many more.Their is no proof that on-the-job accidents has hinder productivity of the Alta Manufacturing.
Thus,the argument is not completely sound.The evident in support with the claim that that Alta Manufacturing should shorten each of the three work shifts by one hour to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents and thereby increase productivity does little to prove that conclusion,since it doesn't address the assumptions already raised.Ultimately the argument might have been strengthen by providing supporting data from past few years rather than just one years,by assuring that Alta Manufacturing has got nice training programs and safety work environment and by providing the relation how on-the-job accidents and increasing of productivity are related to each other.
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- Public figure such as actors, politicians, and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role, they should expect that they will loose at least some of their privacy. 33
- Too much time, money, and energy are spent developing new and more elaborate technology. Society should instead focus on maximizing the use of existing technology for the immediate benefit of its citizens. 50
- China has some innovation, but most it is well documented that it reverse engineers everything in its path. It is doubtful that China will have a real consumer middle class like U.S. and Europe. 50
- During the past year,Alta Manufacturing had thirty percent more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts believe that a significant contributing factor in many on-the-job accidents 77
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 506 350
No. of Characters: 2647 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.743 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.231 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.945 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 191 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 84 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 50.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.773 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.501 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.733 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2692.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 486.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53909465021 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2903081092 2.78398813304 118% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.37037037037 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 833.4 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 81.0 22.8473053892 355% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 196.381785193 57.8364921388 340% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 448.666666667 119.503703932 375% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 81.0 23.324526521 347% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.25449101796 590% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477278712354 0.218282227539 219% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.270459212954 0.0743258471296 364% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120081835586 0.0701772020484 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301373990521 0.128457276422 235% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110164445052 0.0628817314937 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 45.2 14.3799401198 314% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -19.2 48.3550499002 -40% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.1628742515 254% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 36.1 12.197005988 296% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.04 12.5979740519 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.42 8.32208582834 125% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 12.3882235529 250% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.4 11.1389221557 309% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.9071856287 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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