The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and
concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village
rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with
children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children
spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in
the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about Tertian
village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying
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cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate
students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding
of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author concludes that the children in Tertia are reared mostly by parents as opposing to an entire island population based on their interview with the Tertia children. The presenter supports their statement by pointing to the responses given by the children in their interview. He also states that the children predominantly talked about their parents over other residents of the island. However, the support of the argument appears vulnerable and needs further evidence to become ubiquitous.
Firstly, the author provides no information about the kind of questions that were asked in the interview. There is a possibility that the interviewer might have asked questions about the occupation, family tree or siblings which makes the discussion about the children’s parents obvious. There is also a chance where the interviewer is biased towards the conclusion and is asking a loaded questions to prove his/her point. In above cases, the answers provided by the children cannot be treated as the source for taking inferences. And, the final conclusion drawn seems to lack proper foundation.
Secondly, the children who were interviewed may not represent the overall village. For instance, the children that were picked for the interview may come from a family who have settled in the island from outside and were not part of the shared culture of the overall island. Also, if the island has a culture of disregarding children who are erratic and doesn’t follow rules, then the ousted children might have to spend most of their time with their parents as they aren’t allowed to mingle with other children. If either of the above scenarios is true, then the conclusion given based on the evidence doesn’t hold up.
Thirdly, there might be other accurate methodologies in understanding the children’s behavior than the interview method chosen. The interview method is much more objective in nature and views every child under one screen. However, each child should be approached with a different glass to really get into them. Also, the author doesn’t provide any information about the method that the anthropologist, Dr. Field used in coming up with his/her conclusion about the island. We don’t know about the pervasiveness of the approach adopted by anthropologist. There is a possibility that Dr. Field’s approach provides better understanding than the interview. Hence, we mayn’t completely rely on the interview-centered method to get a fool-proof conclusion.
Therefore, as there are many openings that needs fixing in the conclusion in order to hold water, unless the information such as the questionnaire in the interview, background of children selected, approach adopted by other researchers in the study, is not provided with sufficient details concerning the information, the conclusion seems ineffective.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2321 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.135 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.861 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.524 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.436 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.318 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'question'?
Suggestion: question
...s the conclusion and is asking a loaded questions to prove his/her point. In above cases,...
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Line 2, column 597, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... drawn seems to lack proper foundation. Secondly, the children who were intervie...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2399.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40315315315 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96476053126 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486486486486 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4566334552 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.238095238 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.19047619048 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160499592087 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473491699154 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632970479622 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0832580092062 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569130567855 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.