The following appeared as part of a business plan developed by the manager of the Rialto Movie Theater.
"Despite its downtown location, the Rialto Movie Theater, a local institution for five decades, must make big changes or close its doors forever. It should follow the example of the new Apex Theater in the mall outside of town. When the Apex opened last year, it featured a video arcade, plush carpeting and seats, and a state-of-the-art sound system. Furthermore, in a recent survey, over 85 percent of respondents reported that the high price of newly released movies prevents them from going to the movies more than five times per year. Thus, if the Rialto intends to hold on to its share of a decreasing pool of moviegoers, it must offer the same features as Apex."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author recommends that the Rialto Movie Theater pass through a renovation in order to become modern and more attractive like Apex Theater. Based on this recommendation the author predicts that if the Rialto movie Theater do this renovation it will continue working and making profit despite of the decreasing pool of moviegoers. Both recommendation and prediction are not entirely logically cogent, because are based on dubious inferences and questionable assumptions, which require more information to prove they are valid and reliable.
We would ask why the manager wants to renew this historical building. Maybe this is a great differential that could lead people to prefer going to the Rialto Movie Theater rather them other new one. Since it has five decades, it has historical, cultural and probably sentimental values for the moviegoers that should be explored by its managers. Furthermore, it is not stated that the new and modern Apex Theater has great profit and pool of moviegoers. Therefore, how can we be sure that doing this renovation the increase in pool of moviegoers is granted?
Moreover, it is stated that in a recent survey great percentage of respondents reported that the high values of new released movies impair them to go to the movies more than five times per year. However, we would ask some details about this survey. Was it done into moviegoers? What was the sample of the survey? What was the age average of the respondents? All this information could change the inference done so it is not reliable. Furthermore, it does not mean that the pool of moviegoers is decreasing, since we do not know if the sample survey was just moviegoers.
The prediction that the renovation will grant the pool of moviegoers is unsound. How can the manager be sure of that? Maybe the better solution is to maintain affordable prices in order to guarantee a good and faithful pool of people. Did the fact of being modern and completely renewed call people to go to Rialto Movie Theater? Maybe preserve the historical and cultural aspects of this building is the better solution in order to increase the movement and profit, avoiding that this place close its doors.
To sum up, based on all these questions the recommendation and the prediction are not cogent. These presented questions should be answered to prove that inferences and assumptions done by the manager are valid.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 481, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e the movement and profit, avoiding that this place close its doors. To sum up...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0350877193 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79184270933 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461152882206 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6026151818 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3181818182 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1363636364 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95454545455 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182121340158 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499386487148 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610062085668 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101786989717 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523444736965 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 481, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e the movement and profit, avoiding that this place close its doors. To sum up...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0350877193 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79184270933 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461152882206 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6026151818 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3181818182 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1363636364 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95454545455 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182121340158 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499386487148 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610062085668 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101786989717 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523444736965 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.