The following is a memorandum from the business manager of WLSS television station.
"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
Here the author stated that number of viewers and advertisers have been significantly reduced becasue late night news program devoted more time to national news and less time to weather and local news. Also the author stated , in order to increase viewers and advertisers , we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level. But the author has neighther provide any signifacant evidence to proove this nor given any related example.
Firstly , the author stated that viewer reduced because the late-night program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. But the author didn't give any supporting evidence to proove this. Does other channels who forecast national news have less number of viewer and advertisers? Because. it might be possible that people started liking new news channels which provides better news analysis and weather forecast. So, time devotion can not play significant role if the content is not good. Therefore author should have provided supporting evidence.
Secondly, the author stated that most complaints recieved from users were concerned with our stations coverage of weather and local news. It does not specifies that people are concerned with qaulity of content covered by waether and local news or they concerned with timimg allotted for coverage of weather
and local news. So, the author should have have made it more clear.
Also, Author stated that they should revise time alloted to cover weather and local news in order to increase viewer base and to attract more advertiser. But author didn't give any supporting example or evidence that with similar solution other channels increased their viewer base and attracted more advertisers.
So, the author should have provided more evidences to proove his points.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Here the author stated that number of viewers and advertisers have been significantly reduced becasue late night news program devoted more time to national news and less time to weather and local news.
Error: becasue Suggestion: because
Sentence: But the author has neighther provide any signifacant evidence to proove this nor given any related example.
Error: neighther Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: proove Suggestion: prove
Error: signifacant Suggestion: significant
Sentence: But the author didn't give any supporting evidence to proove this.
Error: proove Suggestion: prove
Sentence: Secondly, the author stated that most complaints recieved from users were concerned with our stations coverage of weather and local news.
Error: recieved Suggestion: received
Sentence: It does not specifies that people are concerned with qaulity of content covered by waether and local news or they concerned with timimg allotted for coverage of weather and local news.
Error: waether Suggestion: whether
Error: timimg Suggestion: timing
Error: qaulity Suggestion: quality
Sentence: Also, Author stated that they should revise time alloted to cover weather and local news in order to increase viewer base and to attract more advertiser.
Error: alloted Suggestion: allowed
Sentence: So, the author should have provided more evidences to proove his points.
Error: proove Suggestion: prove
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flaws:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 293 350
No. of Characters: 1496 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.137 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.106 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.329 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.702 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.441 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.619 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...d less time to weather and local news. Also the author stated , in order to increas...
^^^^
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and local news. Also the author stated , in order to increase viewers and advert...
^^
Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rder to increase viewers and advertisers , we should restore the time devoted to w...
^^
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...or given any related example. Firstly , the author stated that viewer reduced b...
^^
Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... weather and local news. But the author didnt give any supporting evidence to proove ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... less number of viewer and advertisers? Because. it might be possible that people start...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ber of viewer and advertisers? Because. it might be possible that people started l...
^^
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ficant role if the content is not good. Therefore author should have provided supporting ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'specify'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: specify
... of weather and local news. It does not specifies that people are concerned with qaulity ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'specify'
Suggestion: specify
... of weather and local news. It does not specifies that people are concerned with qaulity ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 39, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: have
... and local news. So, the author should have have made it more clear. Also, Author sta...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 44, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... local news. So, the author should have have made it more clear. Also, Author sta...
^^^^
Line 8, column 166, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... to attract more advertiser. But author didnt give any supporting example or evidence...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.6327345309 25% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 55.5748502994 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 291.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2852233677 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36865629597 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46735395189 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3128594218 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.533333333 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371348975177 0.218282227539 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145864099606 0.0743258471296 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143023500101 0.0701772020484 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197942324188 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107194082812 0.0628817314937 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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