Fossil evidence indicates that the blompus-an extremely large, carnivorous land mammal-inhabited the continent of Pentagoria for tens of thousands of years until its sudden decline and ultimate extinction about twelve thousand years ago. Scientists have determined that the extinction coincided with a period of significant climate change and with the arrival of the first humans. Some scholars theorize that the climate change so altered the distribution of plants and animals in the environment that the food chain upon which the blompus depended was irretrievably disrupted. Others contend that predation by humans is the more plausible explanation for the rapid population decline.
Write a response in which you discuss specific evidence that could be used to decide between the proposed explanations above.
The above argument indicates that the blompus -an extremely large, carnivorous land mammal extinct due to weather changes and predation by humans. It considers only 2 factors to come to a conclusion, which might not be enough. Humans came into existence more than 100 centuries ago. There is no way one can determine the conditions back then. Earth could have been a complete forest, no infrastructure, few theories state that continents were not formed and all the land mass was together in a single piece. Water quality could have been very different compared to now. The argument is completely based on fossil evidence. Over the years it is quite possible that the fossil has undergone decomposition, destroying prime evidence. Even carbon buried in earth after decades of exposure to heat and pressure converts into diamond.
There are multiple factors which are not considered in this argument. Some of them are as follows. Atmospheric changes could have been one factor, but why did the atmosphere change all of sudden? This is not answered. It is quite possible that the water quality changed, the composition of minerals in water changed, which led to poisoning of the blompus. As earth evolves, mother nature's resources are also altered. Eg: after industrialization, air quality has degraded significantly, water is toxic (containing chlorine and other heavy metals), global warming has increased the overall temperature. This is quite possible back then. Weather does not change all of sudden, there is always a reason for it. It is possible that volcanic eruptions had spread Sulphur and other metals in the air which led to weather change and water adulteration.
As the argument states that the blompus died around the time when humans came into existence, predation cannot be the only cause linking humans to blompus. Humans tend to evolve, be it back then or now. Their primary goal is survival. so when humans came into existence, they started eating the herbs and grass around them. This might have caused a competition for food between humans and the blompus. Earth's resources are limited, so supply is fixed, but if demand increases it leads to imbalance. Humans want shelter to protect themselves, so they might have cut down trees, used the nature to build their homes. And these resources were the food for the blompus.
All in all, there are many factors to take into account. The author has not probed the problem from every angle, and other factors are still uninvestigated. It is true that the only evidence are the fossils to compare to, but concluding a theory based on only few fossils is not adequate.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2137 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.89 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.533 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.069 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.554 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.345 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.243 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.392 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.039 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...or now. Their primary goal is survival. so when humans came into existence, they s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, as to, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03890160183 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65091098359 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530892448513 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6119571117 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.4 119.503703932 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5666666667 23.324526521 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.63333333333 5.70786347227 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.67664670659 342% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132155379121 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030398227942 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458290490791 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0753729257506 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477587605588 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.3799401198 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.197005988 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.36 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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