Some believe that local communities should rely on citizen volunteers for projects benefiting those communities (e.g., organizing youth sports leagues and collecting donations for charity). Others believe that local communities are better served when professional community leaders with the necessary skills and time instead handle such projects.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own
position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Helping the community improves the neighbourhood and the locality. When a local community is working together, the area is mantained. Cleaner neighbourhood results in higher property value, decent neighbours, and a positive overall progress in and around the area. Such communities rely on people to lead and work in the community. They can vary from local citizens to professional leaders, and it is the work of these people who advances the community.
I believe that a local community can benefit from professional community leaders, however citizen volunteers know what's best for the community. As they live nearby, they know what the locality needs, which problems need to be solved, what improvements needs be to done. Example: a local citizen volunteer will know if the local community needs to grow more trees or not on the basis of evaluation of the area. He/She knows which tree/plant to grow depending on the amount of sun, water availability, grazing by animals. In such a case an external professional community leader will not know what problems need to be solved.
A professional community leader will evaluate a community on a global scale. They will compare the efficiency of one community with others, and suggest improvements. As they are professional leaders, they also might have other work and might not give they complete attention to one community. Although they will be far more efficient than a citizen volunteers, they will need to understand the locality. Professional leaders will work for long durations, say 1 year or maybe 5 years, during this period they will know what problems arouse, how the community members are being treated, what needs to be done, as compared to citizen volunteers who will work in their free time only. As a volunteer, they give their extra time to the community, but this might not always be true; working in the community is not their primary work, they will have another primary job which will be their main source of income and hence they cannot give extended durations of time to the community.
This will lead to discontinuity in the projects they undertake. Example: Organizing youth sports leagues, such an event takes months of planning, need a concrete number of people to execute it and those members will have to be there from the start of the event to end. If those members are volunteers it will be very difficult for the community to perform smoothly. Here a professional leader will be suitable, he/she will undertake a project and will make sure that it reaches it's very end. Professional leaders have worked in other departments also, and hence have the necessary management and marketing skills needed. They know how to collect funds for charity, how to get sponsors for local events, what stratergies to implement. Such skills might not be there in citizen volunteers. Take for example cleaning the community roads. A citizen volunteer might tell residents to come together and clean together, bringing all the necessary supplies from their homes. On the other side a professional leader will first get the road evaluated and will put together a plan. If serious issues are there, he will call the required services to get the roads repaired, then will get professionally cleaned which will prolong the life of that same road.
All in all, having a citizen volunteer has it's pros and cons. If the community is small and not aiming for high targets citizen volunteers will be sufficient, however if the community is seeking professional guidance professional leaders should their choice. Eventhough they choose a professional leader, it is completely dependent on community members and they should accept him/her as their leader. Many times community members do not like external leaders coming and taking over their community and there will be some extent of resistance.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'positive overall progress'.
Suggestion: positive overall progress
... property value, decent neighbours, and a positive overall progress in and around the area. Such communitie...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...eaders, however citizen volunteers know whats best for the community. As they live ne...
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Line 9, column 113, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'targets'' or 'target's'?
Suggestion: targets'; target's
...munity is small and not aiming for high targets citizen volunteers will be sufficient, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 38.0 12.4196629213 306% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3230.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 633.0 442.535393258 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10268562401 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01592376844 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76330910351 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440758293839 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 999.9 704.065955056 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5749070964 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.193548387 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4193548387 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.06451612903 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24821902346 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934128045328 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872978683458 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171436706712 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458738607028 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.