Milk and dairy products are rich in vitamin D and calcium—substances essential for building and maintaining bones. Many people therefore say that a diet rich in dairy products can help prevent osteoporosis, a disease that is linked to both environmental and genetic factors and that causes the bones to weaken significantly with age. But a long-term study of a large number of people found that those who consistently consumed dairy products throughout the years of the study have a higher rate of bone fractures than any other participants in the study. Since bone fractures are symptomatic of osteoporosis, this study result shows that a diet rich in dairy products may actually increase, rather than decrease, the risk of osteoporosis.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily the argument is based on the unwarranted assumptions that are made by a group of people; that intake of rich in dairy products can cause an illness called osteoporosis and can also worsen the condition; the argument does not describe enough evidence on differentiating the pros and cons of milk -dairy products on one’s diet, rendering the main conclusion, which may be invalid.
The argument fails to provide proper justification- how osteoporosis is linked to milk and dairy products causing the bone fracture, it can be caused due to deficiency of other substances in a human body or one of the reasons can be- not enough exposure to the sun for Vitamin D can also lead to deficiency, a suggestion is not enough to justify the statement, and sabotaging the milk products itself for increasing the risk of osteoporosis.
The assumption stated by the author that many people state that a diet rich in dairy products can help prevent osteoporosis, but there is no evidence that it will prevent the disease to occur, a disease that is linked to both environmental and genetic factors, these factors can still happen and can cause disease when you are consuming the milk and dairy-rich diet and can cause the bones to weaken. There is no significant evidence to strengthen either of the assumption stated.
The argument claims without warrant that what is justified by a group of people is true without holding proper study and research. So even if we assume some assumptions made by the author to be true, the argument is still lacking because it does not provide information to justify the conclusion of bone fractures caused due to consistent intake of milk and dairy diet.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 294 350
No. of Characters: 1422 1500
No. of Different Words: 137 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.837 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.767 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.403 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.454 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.74 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.192 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 294.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96258503401 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84454015129 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503401360544 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.8473053892 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 151.532982872 57.8364921388 262% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 208.428571429 119.503703932 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.0 23.324526521 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393290048007 0.218282227539 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151985204138 0.0743258471296 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148582153078 0.0701772020484 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235251417571 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110493612475 0.0628817314937 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.9 14.3799401198 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.85 48.3550499002 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 12.197005988 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.38 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 11.1389221557 169% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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